When you appear my feet leave the ground
The song in your voice is the only sound
Flying free as a snow white dove
We live upon a cloud of love
And I feel we float above
To the rhythm of hearts making
Step to the dance love is playing
Neither leads us and no one follows
As one moving to the clouds
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
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*What a magnificent picture!
Such a beautiful piece you have written. Your flow is a bit stumbly in places due to uneven meter, but it's fixable, and the flow instantly picks itself back up anyway. -
wow what can i say but this is very good such an uplifting poem very good my friend.
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Agian a very uplifting poem where do you get your inspiration? I really need some so i can write a happy poem.
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Beautiful work, the horses here I bet are as light as feathers with the sound of breeze in the strides, this is a light feel of sensations. holding the reader till the end to suggest......., anothe read. Adorable composition.
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This is a lovely poem you penned here dear sis. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem. Good luck in the contest, sounds golden to me, Well done
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