Hate flares up in my eyes like fire,
Everyone around is engulfed by my ire,
Rage tears through my soul,
I begin to lose control.
My body begins to become tight,
Fury begins its fearful fight,
It seeps into my mind,
It cannot be confined.
I am irrepressible,
My mind is inaccessible.
I yell and I demolish,
Civility I abolish.
I beat myself and shout,
I let the beast out.
Throwing things around,
Smashing them on the ground.
Cursing at those who enrage me
My words are given in the first degree.
My hate and anger is doubled,
I am deeply troubled.
A contest entry
- Options For All, I Want Emotions! by okadadokie.
550 points, ended March 20, 2007, 40 entries
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Does anger such as this ever surge through you?
Comments
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first impression: its called anger2 and the text is pink...there must be something wrong with the person... i hope i dont hate the poem...
wow...good...no, great...
i really like your rhyme
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it is called Anger II for a reason the II refers to the fact that it is the rhymed version of a previously written free verse poem and the text it supposed to be light red.
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Anger is a powerful emotion. Good job. I liked it, and I liked that even though it rhymed it didn't have a specific rythm.
Good job and good luck.
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This is a pretty good poem. I like how you put so much emotion and thought into this. Great work! keep it uP!
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Nice emotion!
this is very good
Good luck!
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nice
i like it... doesnt everyone feel that way sometimes? lol i know i do but i stopped breaking things along time ago i think -
wow i love the emotion. great job. thanx for your entry and good luck in my contest
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The is a very powerful write, the intensity of the anger is really portrayed through this piece, yet I find it, along with the rhyming scheme, a little forced and...as if you got so much to say and express you dont know what to write first.
but great write none the less
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Thank you, and the poem is actually a rhyme version of freeverse poem I wrote in the past, perhaps that is why it seems a little forced.
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Whoa.... you don't need to tell me twice to stay the hell out of your way when you're pissed...lol.... You've done a awesome job expressing your emotions. Good luck and thanks for the entry in my contest.
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This a powerful and rageful poem. ((is that a word? XD) I can feel the anger pulsing in the text. I can feel it deep within my soul. I feel similar anger very often. People just seem so annoying when you're angry.
'Rage tears through my soul,
I begin to lose control.
My body begins to become tight,
Fury begin its fearful fight,'
This is a good introduction to the beginning of the anger. It helps build up till the climax of the poem. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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Wow the anger is very evident in this poem it is strong and demanding. It says it very loud for all to hear. Well done thanks for entering and best of luck!!!
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Such anger and frustration. The rage that's building up inside you, is over flowing in the poem. Great job. Good luck.
~Oka
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FING LOVE IT!!!
AMAZING I could feel the anger surge through me as I read it the first poem in the contest that really surged through my entire being although this is only the 5th one I read I loved it....I wanna go kick someones ass now
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lol thanks, go kick some ass!!!
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GREAT
They asked for anger and you gave them fire,yes my friend you are good at writing your emotions:Ilike the part...My words are given in the first degree.powerful
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Thank you for your comment. I am glad you like it and think well of it.
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Wow this is some real anger and rage I'm not sure what it is that pissed you off but its apparent that it must have been pretty bad wonderfully written best of luck to you in the contest
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Thanks and you don't know the half of it! lol
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