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Eternal Love

No amount of words can describe how much you mean to me,

tears come to my eyes when I try to think deep enough to write.

Closing my eyes and picturing your arms wrapped around me -

I'd do anything to be within your manly arms right at this time.

You don't love me back and it does break my heart deep inside -

Though deep in my heart I am just so blessed that you talk to me.

To hear your voice and to know you sometimes think of me is bliss.

You say that you are gradually falling in love with my heart too,

and whenever you tell me you care about me and miss me I freeze.

This heart jumps up and down yet I do not feel any discomfort -

knowing that it belongs to you makes me feel safe and respected.
I'd dive into a pool of sharks to save you from a tragic death;

I'd pull you from a burning house and would die saving you.


I'd do everything and anything to make you laugh or smile,

for your pain is my pain and your laughter is also mine.

To see you happy or content makes my world go round,

I can't believe I've finally met the one I'd never leave behind.

I love you and I always will I just want you to hear those words,

you laugh at them and struggle to accept them but they are there.

Forever you my darling, I loved you right from hearing your voice,

your a saint that stopped me sinning and I thank you for aiding me.

If you ever need me for anything, I am proud to be your girl...
 

Author notes

If you tell me this isn't the deepest love that a girl can feel, then I will be no longer a poet. To rest so much love, trust and need in someone... To have a heart that beats only for one person... I would do anything for him and one day I want to prove to him how much I care.

This is about S. We really aren't supposed to be together as there is a big age gap, my ex could try and murder him or quite simply the fact we live far away. Still, we're gonna try and make it work...

as we...

and he does me...

LOVE EACH OTHER! *yup now he does*

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  • Lady Michaella
    February 11
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    aaw
    this is beautiful!

    -Lemon Bee-
    xx


  • The Fun House silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    I'm sorry but this entry is being disqualitifed due to it containing WAY more than 10 lines. The poem is good but not eligible. Sorry.


  • shanghaigirl
    July 18, 2008
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    good poem
    thanks for joining


  • Eire Go Brach
    November 26, 2007

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    This is a amazing poem and really captures love at it's peak. Nicely written but the lines are a bit too long. Good luck in the contest.


  • wanderingstarlet
    August 29, 2007
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    definitely a feeling from the heart that a lotta people have experienced. well written. good luck.


  • Aurielle
    August 11, 2007

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    I don't like the flow i must say but your writing is really good. At the last stanza your missing the period beside "will" but the emotions here is ovious and clear. It is ovious of the sincerity because of the specific imagery you place...


  • ButterflyforChrist
    July 16, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Deep and true. I can feel the emotion here. And I can feel that this it totally from your heart.
    That is a very deep love. And very true love. And very beautiful love.
    Thank you for the wonderful entry.


  • Sensual Sapphire
    June 29, 2007

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    From the heart

    To speak your heart is more dificult than it is to speak your mind. Hopefully this individual is worthy of all you hold in your heart. Hopefully he'll wake up soon and realize what he has in you. Thank you for entering.


  • Bourne Darkness
    June 26, 2007
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    wonderful

    this is a wonderful poem, however the fluency of the writing, not words, is a bit...well lost when the audience reads it. but you may fix that by breaking it up and removing what does not need to be said. other than than you did a wonderful job. good luck in the contest.


  • Hadji Murad
    March 30, 2007

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    This is magnificient, but *sigh* It was hard to make it through the wordiness of the poem. I would seriously recommend cuting the poem down by removing words that don't have any impact. This is such a lovely poem and it's truly hindered by the wordiness. Strong poetry is brief and powerful. I see the power in this poem, but it is tragically diluted by the length of the lines. This is so so so so sooooooo lovely though.


  • JoyfulWriter
    March 12, 2007

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    Oh my! This is truly magnificent! The emotions here run full throttle and give me many ideal images of the love that I seek. So much beauty here too! Great job of expression! Smiles, Terry


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 28, 2007

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    one i think as long as you think it is the deepest love, what matter what we thinkg, you did a great job on this keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • BlackAether Wolf
    February 27, 2007
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    oh my god, that described exactly how I feel towards someone else, you know exactly how to draw out the hidden emotions of others and yourself and place them into writing. I thoughly enjoyed this. and I definately look forward to reading more from you

    A for my Empathic Rose


  • Random Lily
    February 27, 2007

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    I definitely think this sounds like the deepest love anyone can feel. The poem is absolutely beautiful. All of the emotion you put into it really makes it a work of art. Amazing.


  • tawk gold member
    February 27, 2007

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    I can so relate I have a wonderful man like this myself. I never feel like I tell him enough how much I love him. Excellent write

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