How much can you take?
Carrying the pain from a loved one
and yourself in a already wounded heart
Ghosts inside your mind appear,
laughing about the pain you feel.
Pouring in it real deep..
making it all worse.
Only filling your painful thoughts,
with images you don’t want to see.
Laughing about your fears..
letting you stand there alone and crying.
You don’t want them in..
but you can’t get them out.
They squeeze your throat
until there is no air left.
Then your heart stops beating
and there seems no way out anymore.
You just died inside..
Just as your loved one..
Alone…with tears and in silence.
How much can you take?
Author notes
Wolf Mistress
"Snow as in White"
One of my best friends just told me she has a tumor in her lung...not knowing so far if there is a future left for her....I pray God excists and hope he will help her through this.....
I think he excists...it was serious, an abces, and she was ill for long but she is doing fine now
In a list
A contest entry
- sad, life or maybe just about what ever! by DelaneyDisaster.
443 points, ended March 2, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hurting (Invite only) by Beating.
600 points, ended August 25, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just pray for my friend...that's all I ask....
Comments
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wow. I really felt like you were talking about me. Your words really felt like they were directed at me and made me so sad. I'm so sorry for your friend. I know what it's like to have a loved one who is sick. It's the worst thing ever. I loved this piece - it made me feel so sad, which is exactly what I wanted in this contest.
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Thank you for this overwhelming comment...it's indeed hard to experience this...and that's where sadness comes in....
and I am glad she is doing fine now after all she has bin through....
XXJeannette
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Surprise ending.
No matter how bad things are for you, there is always someone worse off, so that message comes through but to reach out and help in such a situation defines the depth of one's character. An honest attempt to portray the rampant feelings and emotions tugging in different directions with the surprise ending of giving up after all.
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aw very nice this is a sad poem and you did a great job, really like it...sad...you did a great job good luck in the conest keep up the good work
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Beautiful !
They squeeze your throat< That's what happens to me. Tears come over Onions only. I was very sad last night. A one liner got to me. My throat and my heart worried me but I pulled through. Wow! The saddness is all worth writing about, it helps. You've hit the mark with this one. Great Penning! And Praying does help too.
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment...can you imagine how many tears I cry
because these onions are hitting me too, just as poems, one-liners..my own missery and the missery from my family and friends,lover, work, world...just name it and it's there for one or more moments, hours, day's.....
Sometimes I wished I could switch my head to off......would that not be great.....
And I know there must be a reason for all we are going through...there must be a higher power...that's where I send my prayers to....
Thnxs again
XXJeannette
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Its quite upsetting to know about your friend and the suddenness I guess is what makes it worse. I hope n pray that each moment of your friend's life is ful to his/her content..
A lovely poem indeed.. this one sings well too.. Keep writing
Take cares, best of luck, best wishes
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Thank you my friend....for your warm comment...
XXJeannette
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What an intense and emotional expression! You make those ghost seem so real by choosing this image that everybody can identify with.
You and your friend are in my thoughts, and I am burning a candle for you all.
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Thank you so much ezilanafor your warm comment...
Luv ya my friend
XXJeannette
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