Death will come to me.
Life with end as i know it.
Friends will leave,
And my heart will break.
I will forever be haunted by my past.
I will forever be
Fallen Angel
Death take me over
A contest entry
- Things with wings by CarolinaSkillet.
600 points, ended October 7, 2007, 12 entries
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wonderfully said....short, and sweet and to the point. very beautiful.
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Short and Sweet
Nice work. I think it could have been longer and I'd bet you could portray a lot more emotion. Yet it is simple and sweet. I like it great job!
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Sometimes, I feel this way, too. I think feeling like this is just a part of adolescence... You've definately captured this well, and I wish you all of the best, Zach.
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sad
i hear you here i no excakly how this feels me i can wait till i die i'll be glad and so will my family
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Short, but quite to the point. It is elementary, but you express so much in these short lines, it hurts to read and think about such an ending for anyone. Please be careful not to be trapped by the hurts and fears that keep us at bay. As soon as that happens, you become your own slave. Be careful and good job.
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you have my words as long as i have friends that care for me as much as i can see u do and as long as i have friends by my side like u death can not take me with out a fight....thanks for being there for me
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This is quiet short, but yet a beautiful write indeed.
-Alastor
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A sad yet beautiful write. IF we look at life as just this one, it is haunting to thing it ends and there is nothing else left. I am so thankful to know there is life with the Lord after we leave here if we choose to believe.
Nice job.
Sam
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