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A Superficial Kind Of Love



Like dust that covers the heart

smothering love's power

it creates a sensual illusion

that only time will uncover.


Those who meet the misfortune

of superficial love

firsthand

at the magnitude and intensity

in which it forms

will quickly recognize

its eccentric characteristics.


With simplicity it tiptoes

around the heart like a

bad habit or hungering addiction

posing as the tranquility that

sometimes

appears in the scented smoke

arising from the

spiritual side of life.


It reigns supreme

and flies like flaming passion

taking over everything that is.

Yes, superficial love is but

a fleeting feeling that

in time

fades into the ashes of what

true love should be.

Author notes

I chose the word superficial but had to link it to something tangible to show it. I'll understand if this means the poem has to be DQ'd.

I used all the words of the bank.

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  • Puppydog gold member
    March 15, 2007

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    BEAUTIFUL!

    Especially these days love seems to be exactly this way, never real or true. One must keep hoping and praying though.


  • Frozentearz
    March 8, 2007

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    I know this is late in coming I just wanted to stop by and congratulate you on your H.M. this was a great contest with many great writers.
    Thanks for sharing
    Tearz


  • Puppydog gold member
    March 3, 2007
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    FANTASTIC WRITE!

    So many of us are caught in this kind of love, not a real one but one of lies and diceit. It is so hurtful and destructive.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    March 1, 2007

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    A beautiful write and message. Masterful use of the word bank. An excellent description of superficial love. Nice imagery. Very good flow and tone. Lovely expression of feeling. Excellent word choice. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    February 28, 2007

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    Sensational, I love your word bank writes, brilliant job, you have captured all the emotion of superficial love in this piece..... wonderful

    Karen


  • Frogzter gold member
    February 27, 2007

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    I see no reason why it would be DQ'd. YOu have chosen a word and wrote what you drew from it! This has a message and you used all the words to boot! Bravo! Loved it and thanks for the entry, more than a worthy read! Huggles,
    Frogz~


  • Frozentearz
    February 27, 2007
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    I'm not sure why you thought it should be Dq..
    The word is in the poem, and in your author notes think that covers all
    Now for the poem, kudos to you for using all the words,
    But I will focus on the word of choice, and you have most certinly brought forth your message within your write, There is no power in superfical love,It is as you have written a smoke screen nothing more then desire you have described this word in all its entities,
    Well done and thanks for sharing.
    Warm thoughts
    Frozentearz


  • troyias
    February 27, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is a wonderful and expressive poem. Full of beauty and so many emotions that are real and imagined. Great Job sis

    *Go with God*

    Valerie


  • Samplette gold member
    February 27, 2007

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    I am sure several will use all the words. I was goind to, but desided not to. This is outstanding. Very well written. You can tell you put a lot of time and heart into this. I wish you the best in the contest.
    Sam

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