Dreaming is the only thing keeping me awake
My sadness always leaving me in a deep slumber
No one there to awaken me
Since you left..
I find myself staring at the walls
Speechless.
My soul being my only friend
For I have no life in reality.
I am unable to eat or drink
For there is no reason to
Since you left..
I will surely die alone
Because of what you did to me.
In a way you left me dead
With no hope of surviving
Or getting past my awful fate.
When I dream you are in my thoughts
But you abandon me
Like you did in the real world.
I just can't do anything
Not one thing,
Since you left..
In a list
A contest entry
- I want you to make me feel it! by unanswered.
450 points, ended March 7, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Why-There are many options by hose30.
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Gold trophy winner
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Amazing
this poem was amazing.. great emotion.. great sadness.. but it was a very great piece of writing, good luck in the contest
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great write very emotional good job
keep up the great work
thank you for entering the contest
good luck and best of wishes to you
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thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. it is appreciated.
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heartwarming
It was truly heartwarming. I like you darkness here. You r expression. Good job and I wish you well in the contest.
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thanks for the gold. and thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. i appreciate it.
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this is deeply beautiful and equally heart wrenching. I really enjoyed reading this one. I have felt that undeniable pain of scorn before. great way to capture your feelings. thank you for entering.
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thank you for your kind comment, it means a lot.
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Loved It
I love the title...and how you interwove it into the
lines of the poem, really making it all click, yes, it
seems to be a winner.
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aw thank you. that's so nice of you to say that!
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I'm too numb (or maybe dumb) to fall in love
But I connected with this anyway, on the level of writing about something in order to make it go away. If that wasn't what you were doing here, then okay, but that's how I took it, which again is one of the joys of writing for me; no two people see it quite the same.
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true. no two people will see it the same but they might feel the same way. but thanks for commenting.
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This is sadly beautiful. It is so hard to go on with our lives when our love one leaves us...what a painful time in our life. I have been there I know. This is a great write. You did a great job.
Sam
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thank you for taking the time to comment. not many people do. xD
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