To you, who watches every step I take
I offer these few lines that crossed my mind
My spirit is asleep while you’re awake
And while you see, my eyes are fully blind
Oh creature of the night, I bow to thee
Will you bestow your wisdom’s precious spark
Upon my weary mind, so I may see
Without the use of vision in the dark
Reveal the hidden secrets that now sleep
Within the lap of darkness – the unknown
And let the fruit of knowledge gently reap
Reserve a seat for me on wisdom’s throne
Oh gentle owl, my spirit-guide, my muse
May wisdom’s nectar patiently infuse
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I like the direction you went with this. I can see where you look to Owl for guidance. I like the contrast between your sleep and Owl's waking time. Thank you for entering, good luck!
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Flawless meter! I really liked the 2nd stanza, for seeing without the eyes is a skill/gift that too few have or utilize . . . imagine if we were all so blessed to be able to see beyond the obvious. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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Outstanding
I liked the way you have created opposites in the poem a technique that you find a lot in Elizabethan poetry. This flows beautifully and I liked the symbolic image of the owl. A lovely sonnet to read.
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very well done indeed. Love getting to read about the spirit guide of the owl.
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Lovely poem. Structurally perfect.
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thank you ...
I am enjoying this contest very much ...
maa
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your rhyme is fantastic.
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thank you for your voice and kind words, tyler ...
maa
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very well done not many write sonnets now days oddly I thought the rhymnign was meant ot be for three stanzas od aabb and the last two cc hmm oh well that is how my sonnets are written but eitherway this is very well done. Thank you dso much for evntering and I wish you the best of luck!
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thank you so much for your voice and kind comment, dear lamia ... indeed, there are different sonnet-forms (english, petrarchan, spenserian etc.) I just used the traditional rules of the english sonnet, which is an abab cdcd efef gg rhyme scheme and a iambic pentameter ... jm kenyon (genielassie) has published a great column about sonnet-forms, if you enjoy sonnets, it could be a source of inspiration for you ... here's the link : http://allpoetry.com/list/25619-Sonnet-Form-Columns
blessings,
maa
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thank you for your voice, ryan ...
maa
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larmes de sagesse
merci, chere coeure, pour vos larmes de sagesse qui inspirent et nourrissent, à travers le délicat oiseau, dont le chant mélodieux emplit nos nuits d'éveil. vos paroles coulent comme la rivière d'une fontaine enchantée, et font miroiter dans la profondeur de notre âme le scintillement de l'éternité.
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merciiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
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Gorgeous!
This was pure joy to read, I love the owl, and have used this same picture for a poem or two. Love it!
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oh, wonderful ... I would love to read your owl-poems ... owl is the guide walking on my left side (wolf on the right) ...
by the way, do you have any idea about the name of the painter, so I may give credit ?
thanksie,
maa
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Love this-
Magnificent verse You have penned my Friend
Love the animal medicine You have chosen to verse on and love the picture which adds that extra Touch!
One of my all time favorites!!
Gorgeous form You pen with such ease and the power
that exudes is Beautiful to inhale and sense
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!!
Can't help but feel empowerment after reading
Love this one!!
Many blessings to You in the contest
Best wishes always
and much love~ Desire~*~
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your visits always fill me with joy, dear desire ... your comments are so uplifting and empowering, and your words always so kind ...
I love you,
marion
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Excellent...
I don't think any form is a challenge to you. I thoroughly enjoy the way you write, and not just 'cause your my sister.
Brother Buddy
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I am in an "animal-medicine-spirit-guide-phase" right now ... thanks to celticmoon's inspiring contest ... since somebody had already adopted "owl", I felt that I had to write a tribute to her ... and lucky I was to find a contest whose host asked for form-poetry, which is a source of joy for me, when I write it ...
thank you, dear brother ...
marion
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Just beautiful and so full of imagery. I so enjoyed reading your write. So full of emotions. Good luck in the contest
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thank you so much for your precious visit, angel ... your applause is nectar for my soul ...
marion
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Sweet watcher who absorbs each step the dance
may take in flight, in rest, insight in all,
reap now all years of patience to advance -
there's neither sleep nor waking, rise nor fall.
There is no bow to bend, but bow whose dart
bestowed may spark the inner eye of love,
peep now, false fears dissolve, solved whole and part,
while vision's shared with tit and turtle dove.
The fruit of knowledge should be shared - partake
to heart's desire, inspiring others, Way
precludes all reservations some would make, -
shake out your lungs, song sung itself sheds ray.
Who wisdom wills will find perchance that light
springs not from muse but inner wings for flight ...
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wow, this poem goes right into my treasure-chest ...
thank you so much, jonathan, it has great transformative power ... one of your very bestestest poems you have offered me so far ... I am very touched by it, really ...
marion
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