Sound's magnification carries on a silvery mist,
half remembered strings softly play on my mind.
Of nights spent in enamored heavenly bliss,
safe and warm wrapped in arms of love blind.
Beguiled capture my hearts sweetest surrender,
bore in a faith at depths I've never transversed.
You dangled my soul on a thread ever so slender,
watching me stumble through your act well rehearsed.
Well cloaked in your shroud of passion's illusion,
insincerity draped behind eyes filled with lies.
I offered my body and soul in love's confusions,
and you devoured love given in ample supply.
In swirling thickened mist, judgment clouded,
foolishly I rushed over rivers of no return.
Unaware of your promise of love disavowed,
amused while my emotional passion's churned.
photo: REUTERS/Claro Cortes IV (CHINA)
courtesy of ea;
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A contest entry
- Fog by ea.
390 points, ended February 27, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you much ea for this silver.`Suseann
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BEAUTIFUL!
One is often left wondering, not realizing that the other is not feeling the same. It does hurt so much not to have your heart desires feeling the same way you do.
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This poem really touched me and moved me to tears, actually, the first time I read it. Thank you for your entry.
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The flow of this is incredible. You did wonderful
The best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari -
Superb
How beautiful is this!---you have woven a very beautiful piece of work with your wonderful wording, it is etched with deep emotions and amazing imagery. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Shaz xx
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Gorgeous writing which doesn't make mention of the word "FOG" once, but does leave the reader a feeling of sensing as though there in that mist of fog and/or tears. Very powerful images and emotions written into this poem.
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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Magnificently rhymed and emotive. Put this at the top of the tree.
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Wow sweetie... beautifully written and the emotions in this one is amazing... Loved the third verse... Love how you began the poem with the magnificent silver mist... and in the end judgment is clouded.... outstanding piece of work, each time I read you, I'm just amazing by the brilliance of our pen! Well done! Love you, Annie
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