Forgiving smiles,
cold beers in the fridge,
friends...
and sunshine.
A contest entry
- In 10 words by Lavender Butterfly.
370 points, ended February 28, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"How realistic and sincere"....butterflies(dreams)with eyes wide open....this is the most utopical 10 words-reflection possibly giving the subject chosen.it's just a beautiful way of painting the reality so that suits best with our retina(well...that's what poetry is about)I don't know why but each verse underlines even more how lonely we all are and how ridiculous we look like when we use silly pretexes like a beer or a tea-party to pretend we forgive,that we care...enough....I'm just going through a sad period....as a form of art this piece is lovely, but to call it realistic it would just prove my theory.hmmm.....well done again Mr C!
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Congrats on the bronze Mr C... this one was surely
a winner!!!! 10 words of life's simplest pleasures.
A fun and friendly afternoon!!! that
is until someone brings out the tequila,, or as
I like to call it ( to kill ya) then it's all
fights, innuendo, balling and brawling, with
the eventuality of riding that porcelain bus all night long with frequent stops in Pukeville. Yep... Good times..I remember them well.
laurie.
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Right bloody on!
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Don't get much better than that, unless you throw in the hot tub. Yep good times and good friends.
Best of luck in this contest.
Becky
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How realistic and sincere. A great piece!
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in my contest... x
Love and light,
Butterfly.
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Yup! Works every time!
...Best way to spend a Sunday afternoon (except I prefer champagne!).
Don't you just love the hubub of animated conversation among friends?
Great effort (~ oh, formidable rival!), so best of luck!
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