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Darkness Fell

Knocking over the bottle of ink
Paper now blotched
The splatter from a quill
The stain on a heart.

An abyss draws one in
Dense fog surrounds innocense

The allure of darkness

A frail mind consumed. 

 

It would defile that memory

Using mystic forces

The trauma only grew

The ending only tragic

 

There was no funeral

As the world became frantic

Twilight fell over that life

Induced by disturbance. 

 

Stark landscapes surround

They detach the imagination

With an incoherent lullaby

So delicate, fluttering...yet shrouded

 

The sound becoming tangled

Soon hushed and misled

The notes severed by obscurity

A tune turned ghostly

 

Deep desire would perish 

Lithium to control

Brainwaves inhabited by obsession

Origin no longer known. 

 

Thoughts crumble away

Descend into the labyrinth

A shrine under siege

A soul now hollow

 

Tarnished hearts meet in secrecy

horomones flare in passion

The past possibly destroyed

As two bodies merge.

 

 

Author notes

Option #1. I used every word in order. I love wordbanks because I end up writing stuff I normally wouldn't write. Words from wordbank are bold. This came strictly from the imagination. This has nothing to do with my reality.

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  • Barbara gold member
    February 27, 2007
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    The second stanza is my favorite, and has the power to stand on its own as a simgle poem. I found the thought to be a little fragmented in this, although the use of punctuation to indicate pauses might benefit. All in all, good use of the word bank.


  • Debbysmiles gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    I think you used the words wonderfully but still felt as each stanza stood on it's own.. as if I was reading a number of shorts. Still, I enjoyed them all. Blessings. Debby

  • lostskylark
    February 26, 2007
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    i was a little confused by it. it seems to cover to much ground. though the stanza on there own were very nice.


    • Vorondwen gold member
      February 26, 2007
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      I don't usually mention the fact that I tend to make these types of poems not flow perfectly together on purpose. I make the stanzas tight, but the overall poem is more loose. Thanks for the comment!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    February 26, 2007

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    BRAVO..Those word bank things drive me nuts that I finally just let it go and not enter..This was amazing and was a great piece. Very talented...Great work.
    Soulful Woman

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