So I have to admit
That I was a little taken
By the photo you sent
It was beautiful
I had to agree
With much that you wrote
It was so well considered
And persuasive
And when after all
We finally met
I felt close to you
Connected in some way
I have to be careful
Around you now
A little more guarded, for
I am on the verge of love
So I have a view of my life
And it could be as it is
And your friendship
Has a deep meaning to me
But I have lost some ground
Between my feet and the edge
I have to stand firmer, for
I am closer than I thought
And you may not see it
Although I think you do
I have some deeper feelings
They have come in to play
I think I fall into habits,
I like being with you
And I admit it is so very nice
You are warm and caring… yes
I have chosen a path for my life
And I will test my will to go on
I will try not to think of you, for
I waver on the verge of love.
Author notes
a frequent topic in my writing is the complexities of romantic relationships
A contest entry
- Poetry Themes by Nicole Hanna.
1000 points, ended March 3, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Best of the Best Season Three Preliminary by B Chandler.
300 points, ended March 15, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All I want is the TRUTH by XHollowXEyesX.
450 points, ended March 12, 2007, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is almost like a reality check of mind, keeping control rather shakily. Like the narrator is trying only to convince himself and be cautious.
I don't make any sense but I know what I mean 
Laura x
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"I have to be careful
Around you now
A little more guarded, for
I am on the verge of love"
Sighhh...Why be so careful, Poet??? Life is far too brief as it is, my Friend...Love is a rare & precious thing, as you well know...Beautifully penned... Wanda
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verge of love
i think this is a reflective write in the sense of the experience of passion and the idea of control... this voice seeks to determine the boundaries of dicipline... so this is an interesting poem...PK
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wanting to feel loved yet not be held or hurt by it. an interesting perpesctive of the topic. You have written this very well,i can feel the emotion.
thanks for entering -
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Thank you 88
for your contest and kind words and comments...PK
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You use simple words and phrases here - still this poem is so very powerful in its gentle and soft-spoken simplicity. One gets the idea that this one was written with such honesty and the reflective quality moves the tender branches of the heart. This one moved me... Beautifully written and the voice here so very authentic....and that is what makes a poem great.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you so much Nicolette
for your most kind words and generous comments....PK
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Verge to Love, or Fear to Love
Wow Pkid, this is awesome...I felt every word...there's a sense of fear in this poem. Love is a powerful elixir, and habits can be broken. With time all becomes clear.
Love this...alot.
LL
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Thank you LL
It is always wonderful to hear from you
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Familiar feeling accurately and eloquently expressed in this poem. The ambivalent feelings cause by a choice of the mind that is afflicted by longing of the heart reflect wonderfully in the words of this poem. The image in the background shows a landmark in Paris, perhaps not the best place not to fall in love. Thank you for creating and sharing. I hope this time my comment will not throw you out of the contest, in which I wish you th ebest of luck. Take care,
U
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Thank you Unda
Thank you for your kind words and generous comments.If I get kicked out of a good poetry contest I'd feel like your icon--a cat with attitude! yes,Paris is not the place for this poem ....PK
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Great write
I love this...
I have to be careful
Around you now
A little more guarded, for
I am on the verge of love
interesting how when we are opening our heart, at the exact time we wish to guard it.
Love the ending.
Michelle
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Thank you Michelle
for your kind words and geneous comment... there is something to this..guarding, yes.
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To teeter on the brink is a dizzying time...should you fall or save yourself lol the complexity of a heart in turmoil. I love it. Will you or won't you?
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Thank you Chez
stay tuned for part two
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Oh right...sometimes it is just impossible to hold back the surge of love.
This is darling. But with your toes upon the edge, I sense it is time to take a leap of faith!
Great Write!
Bravo!
Marianne
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I am a big fan of your work
so thank you so much for your kind words...Pk
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I can't explain it, but this really hit me hard. Perhaps it's the frankness of the speech, the natural way the words fall from the tongue when read aloud, the honesty of the subject. I don't know, and I wont psychoanalyze my reaction to it more than this. lol. Beautiful. I couldn't be more pleased with a first entry.
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