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"What do we do with this thing?
this fiery woman who will not
back down or be silent?"

Barracade her. Subject her to
overwhelming and the weight of
3 million dollars on her shoulders.

Poke and prod her until she becomes
lifeless, curled up in a corner,
fetal. She asked for it, ya know,

begged, berrated, and yelled until
she got her way. Let's watch her
crumble, shatter, explode into
fragments of her former self.

We'll call it a promotion, give
her enough money to sate,
enchant her with the guise of freedom,
bury her with red tape.

Let's encourage her individuality and
then hang her with it. She looks
like she knows that story well.
Promise her the world and beat her with it.

Assholes in ties. Bureaucracy tattooed.
Blue hair cannot cover the slime of a
salesman. I was bought, for 32 thousand
and two weeks paid vacation.

Please tell me what you think

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  • NoUseForAName
    March 1, 2007
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    Thank you both. I have a feeling this is going to end up in my sludge pile.


  • Danna Hobart
    February 28, 2007

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    Damn, Tiffany. it doesn't sound like the new job is going very well.

    There isn't much I can suggest you change, because frankly, it is brilliant. You have too many r's in berate though.


  • hoodoolover silver member
    February 26, 2007
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    I actually read this earlier , but didn't comment as it was a work in progress. I really like this, I am not sure who you are talking about exactly but what came to mind was Brittany Spears. Our world is so bizarre isn't it, great write in my humble opinion!