You, whom He's called,
need not be afraid,
for His others do
not squander as you have-
they have been
without emptiness,
complete in other ways-
As you are to the bottom,
they are brimmed,
As you are without plenty,
Their pockets teeming,
For what you are yearning
they know not that desire-
As you have been hungry,
they are never full.
Your lips -parched,
their thirst , hardly quenched.
They, blessed with plenty,
yours are with wits,
Ears listen,
Mind bends
Eyes see through
the prism's helter -skelter
the sordid mirage,
arms out, soul searched-
Diamond
in the rough.
Copyright© 2001 Zealberry(All rights reserved)
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'Inspired by and dedicated to a once- homeless lover of God'
Written June 24th, 2003
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good job.
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Funny how a homeless person can be a believer, they live in squaller yet have faith in the unseen, interesting concept. You know i struggle to understand your faith, but you never know, where there's life there's hope
Enjoyable thought provoking read, (says she who only dips one inch into a fathom)
Barb -
From the first two lines until the very end, every word embraced me. To be one "whom He's called" is of no material value but still the greatest gift of all. What a wonderful piece, CookieZeal. I know you'll succeed in all your endeavors.
P.S. The title says so much... I would love to know how you chose it. It's perfect. I have a hard time with titles myself.
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I dont know what I believe actually
Some days I think theres a god, and some days I dont
all I know is.....ive been hungry and homeless growing up, Ive gone without, and that makes me more grateful for small things, than if I had always had what I needed and wanted.
Im glad (yes I said GLAD) that I had to go without things growing up, (yes, even food sometimes) because Im a more grateful person because of it. You dont know what its like until youve lived it I guess. Its a common theme in hollywood movies....rich people finding themselves tossed out into the streets, pennyless.....and by the end of the movie, they are thankful to get a piece of three day old bread, and their attitude toward ALL people has changed.
It doesnt have anything to do with God for me, its about the fact that I know what its like, so I can understand. or um something like that.
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I came to this as an agnostic, drawn by the first two lines:
"You, whom He's called,
"need not be afraid,"
to see if there was some salvation on offer which I could test without fear. Instead I found something human, a painfully accurate description of our reaction to the homeless - some pity, superiority and judgment (which I perceived in "which others do not squander as you have"), but ultimately some acceptance of people as people, whether they live on streets or in condos.
The voice, the tone and flow all work well together and make this a touching piece.
I'm still agnostic, though and I will have to keep looking.
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I came to this as an agnostic, drawn by the first two lines:
"You, whom He's called,
"need not be afraid,"
to see if there was some salvation on offer which I could test without fear. Instead I found something human, a painfully accurate description of our reaction to the homeless - some pity, superiority and judgment (which I perceived in "which others do not squander as you have"), but ultimately some acceptance of people as people, whether they live on streets or in condos.
The voice, the tone and flow all work well together and make this a touching piece.
I'm still agnostic, though and I will have to keep looking.
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Oh, its wonderful to see you have posted some new work! I love this piece, that photo is compelling, the background is stunning, I want it bad! And the content, well, I have worked with these people as well, and know there is much heart and soul and but for the grace of God, we could be in their shoes. Many a good man (and woman) is walking the street looking for something that kick-starts them, I love this poem! I'm going looking for more!
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Whenever I see a homeless person, I try to at least smile at them if I don't have time to talk. I find it to be humbling, thougt provoking and inspirational. It always touches my heart, as does this.
~Angela -
I love the poetic/philosophical contrasts. A lot of meat in this one. Funny, I spent a good hour tonight looking for a certain homeless organization online...no luck. But I struck paydirt here. Tells me I'm on track. Your poems never let me down. Peace & Love. ET
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I see what you're getting at here. But, don't you think when people choose not to use their "God given" gifts. . .
I could be off base here.
I'm just a retired guy living off my pension. . .what do I know. -
the wIdows mite..a very poor lady who gave all she had was worth so much morre to the son of God then the rich man's treasures....
faith is simple and free and God provides or the faithful no matter their status...Artis -
As you are to the bottom,
they are brimmed,
As you are without plenty,
Their pockets teeming,
Love these lines. Exqusite. So much truth to ponder in this wonderful piece. Ah, the stories I could tell. Anyway, well done, Cookie.
God love you,
~Mary o
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don\'t change a word, awesome
Di- How very beautiful this piece is. A heavenly grace woven through this masterpiece. I really enjoyed the unfolding of 2 types of persons in the world. Those who try to fill the void in life with material possessions. Seeking more and more and the void still remains. Verses the group that have never had excess, struggle to make their way through-out life and are truly rich beyond measure. Their wealth comes from knowing, trusting, loving, the Lord Jesus with all their hearts. Their treasures are awaiting in Heaven. The others will try anything avenue to fill the void and always know an emptiness, unless they discover our Savior. What an awesome skilled write you have here. Your style always humbles me...... I am curious as to where you found the jeweled border used on your presentation? It is both unique , pretty and fits your poem very well. I could imagine a lot of pieces this type of border would pull together.Pieces nicely gift wrapped into a priceless package. God Bless YOu and the Family
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Thank you all! Basically, it is showing the social circumstances of the impoverished and the privileged. The appetite of those things needed as opposed to those things conditioned are two different climates.
One is in need, but especially gracious and realized
The Other is full, but doesn't know how much they have.
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I came back on this one, I think that its more important to have the things of the Lord that richness inside the heart for that is what lasts and counts in Him. Then to have the things of this world though its tempary and it maybe pleasing to the flesh, its not going last.....and sometimes its hard to really reflect or dicipline ourselves enough to follow in this reflection though inside its the hearts desire....its a battle between sometimes both.... Love,Sherry
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Food for the Soul
You, dearest Poetess, are soooooooo amazingly clever! My goodness, the depth of your thoughts ... No wonder you are into ministry ... I wish we could sit together and share that promised cuppa ... and talk and talk ...
Thank you for the spirituallity oozing from your words. And thank you for a beautiful background here - it suits your poem ...
Love
Myra -
This was really a great piece cookie. The words used for imagery were great... structure.. all of it to be raved about. The contrast of individuals really make this poem strong- pulling together with a solid ending. A ten for sure!
Kimmie
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Thank you!! I think either would work, but the idea is that
ONE might never know what's enough! The "all-you-can-eat" buffet syndrome!
That is what I meant.
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All can shine with a little polish...
As you have been hungry,
they are never full.
*I think you meant to say "ever" full there
not "never" full..*
Hugs...Eddy -
aahhh, Cookie this is remarkable with out harsh judgement
or crucifiction you welcome the loney lost hearts to hear their
calling of their nature and gift...
good to see you up to writing again,
been missing you tons!!!!
happy Holidays,
I will be away for a short while.
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