dear [lover],
what have you done to me
i'm a [wreak] and im sure you know it
you filled me up with [everything] you had
just to take it all away
i tried to not make you my everything
because then i wouldnt have [anything] left
but too late for that now
you're gone and im [alone]
you told me not to [break] your heart
so you wouldnt break mine
that, that was just another lie
to steal my heart away from [me]
you are all that i think about
everything thats [twisting] inside my mind
maybe someday you'll realize
im the girl who in the ending
you [wish] you hadn't let go of
until then fuck the love life
i just want to live [MY] life
sincerely,
just [another] girl
who you stole her heart from
Author notes
I'm digging. Wrote it last nightt.
A contest entry
- LOVE LOST by Darc Soul.
300 points, ended March 2, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Commentsss?
Comments
1 - 8 of 8
-
i agree the parenthesis definitely did justice to the piece as a whole. i also love the title very much.
-
OMG
Luv it darlin I luv the whole parenthesis thingy it makes it even more catchy
-
i really liked this poem...its wicked...it reminded me of what one of my ex's did to me...keep up the good writing...
flic
-
I really liked your poem and it was really well writen. You are a great writer. Great job and keep up the work.
Lindsay -
Wonderful
This is a wonderful, I especially loved the stanza:
"maybe someday you'll realize
im the girl who in the ending
you [wish] you hadn't let go of"
That is a great part of this piece, it reminds me so much of myself..... well good job and good luck!!! -
it seems like every first love
first imresion " like someone from past was talking to me" -
Amazing.
:]
Rad.
sincerely,
just [another] girl
who you stole her heart from
I loved that part best.
:]
You are so amazing.
When you move back
We shall sit in my room
And write poetry together.
Yay.
Lol.
Here's a little poem for you:
If you break her heart
I'll kick your ass
I'll stomp on you
In broken glass
I'll kick you and beat you
Till blood comes out your head
You better not break her heart
Or you're going to be dead.
Hehe. That's how much I care
About my Kayteeface!
NO ONE breaks your heart and gets away with it!
:]
I love you, darling!
Miss you tons!
-
I'm digging it too.
I love the ending sweetie. ♥
~Princess of Shadows~
Adding your comment:
1 - 8 of 8
