Baby, you're my all.
Baby, I never want to see us fall.
Baby, I'll never let you down,
Because baby in your love I drown.
It's you that makes me love like no other,
And it's you that I want to smother,
In my love and hug you like there is no end
Because to me you are my best friend.
I can't comprehend,
How when I am with you I ascend,
Into a daze that's everlasting.
You sent your love casting,
And we'll never part,
Because you and me are attached at the heart.
TO MY BOYFRIEND WHOM I LOVE MORE THAN MY OWN LIFE.
A contest entry
- biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ah, young love. It is ever so sweet. This is very sweet and sentimental. The only man I've ever felt this way about is my son. I would die for him. All other men come and go. This is very nice though some of the rhyme seems a little forced. But it flows pretty well. I think my favorite part would have to be, "It's you that makes me love like no other,
And it's you that I want to smother,". Simply because it can be taken more than one way. Both light and dark. Well done.
jill
ps. thanks for taking the time to read mine.
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*cries*
it's so sweet...I shouldn't have read it right now... I am all mixed up inside... *smiles weakly* but it was beautiful.
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