I will not grieve for you in spring
when swallows shuffle gray skies
until there is more blue.
I will not grieve for you in summer
for I will be caught by blossoms
burgeoning with sweet fruit.
I will not grieve for you in autumn
for harvest of bright bouquets
last forever on our kitchen table.
I will not grieve for you in winter
for it is so still, I can hear ancestor’s
welcoming you home.
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A contest entry
- Let Her words Inspire you to beauty/ 30 lines of less by mysticstorm.
600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A wonder write for the quote. It feels as if it belongs with it. I love the repeat line and change of seasons to show it's deepth.
Well done!
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Beautiful!
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I love this. It really fits the picture, a bit pouty and emotional but dressed in beautiful phrases to make it anything but an emotional rant, to make it something pretty. I would only suggest that perhaps you make the first bit, about spring, the same format as the others, but I'm sure you have a reason not to do so, and it's fine as-is. Great piece!
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"I will not grieve for you in spring
when swallows shuffle gray skies
until there is more blue."
Sighhh...Ahhh...exquisite. 
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This is absolutely beautiful.
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ah, lovely piece. Nice touch to it.
see you around the deep end
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Ah Carol . . . the seasons tinted with human emotion . . . oh so beautifully stated!!!!!!
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This is definitely well-written. It is very descriptive and I hope you win the contest!
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