I sit here with my mind in turmoil
screaming with tears streaming down my
face alone lost afraid and wishing
for you to go away so I can
take up the blade that will end
this silent screams within my head.
I open my mouth and nothing
comes out nothing at all
you see the shape of my mouth
in that silent scream
I want this all to end to
go away forever more I want to
die I want to sleep forever.
Scream-less, dreamless, forever
kind of sleep this is what I wish
for the blade to take to my wrists
slitting along the vein letting the
blood drip down and watch its crimson
trail, watching as each droplet sliding
down my arm towards the inevitable end
of my life slowly seeping to that means.
Silent screams, silent cries
silence in my head now I have
said my final good byes
now this end will come to me
I will be alone no more I will have
the darkness to keep me company.
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I loved it.
Good job.
And Good luck.
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ummm...all I gotta say is.
DIAAAAAAAAAAAMN!
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ohh this was a gret write..i can relate to this poem and the feelings that you wrote about...you are a very talented author and write beautifully keep writitng your talented and take care
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Thank you. Silent screams, an oxymoron no doubt but it does bring across a powerful meaning. Good write. Thankd for entering and complying to my request. Good luck.
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we open our mouth to sing a song...but with helplessness the song turns into a scream...that is life ..you have expressed it very well.but we open our mouth to scream ..but the scream turns into a song ,that is our poem--and that is poetry...
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Please put the option number in your author notes, or I will be forcd to DQ you. I hope I don't have to. When you do, that is if you do I will comment on your poem. Thanks.
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I put it in I had to do an edit you must of caught it just as I was doing the edit for it...Hope you like.
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Ok. Thank you.
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Very nice, loves!
I like it a lot, I think your writing has improved.
You've got some really great lines in here, though in some ways I wish it could be on a brighter topic, not that I really have room to say such.
Just a few things I'd suggest is changing "crys" to "cries," and in the next to last stanza do something about the last two lines ending in the word "end."
Other than that, I really enjoyed this.
-Allura -
~sighs~ a beautiful peice very painful very dark but everytime read this I worry for you...be safe sister, this is another wonderful peice
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just you hang on in there a minute, we need to get to the bottom of this, right this very minute, this is too dark for my liking
im'ing you now.
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