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Stormy Seas

The waters of my soul are swirling and churning
The skies are dark and grim
My compass no longer points true North
My crew mates seem a world away

My ship's boards are creaking with pressure
threatening to give way
The stormy sea just beyond my walls
is anxious to break through

With sweet seduction it calls my name
My walls grow weaker by the day
My resistance to it's voice is whittling away
In a part deep down I yearn for the black abyss

Yet stubborn strength maintains my walls
The hopeless optimist within scans the horizon
searching for a patch of blue, a mound of dirt
a sign of life- a hope for the future

I must deafen my ears to the calling of the sea
I must reach out to my crew mates
I must have faith that the skies will clear
the Northern Star will guide my way

Upon a sea so dark and turbid
there is always hope, a promise of tomorrow
If I open my heart I will never be alone
For even with no compass, He will show me the way

Author notes

September 27, 2006 I found out that I was a mommy to an angel. At almost 12wks pregnant, expecting to see my baby and hear the heartbeat, I found out that my baby had died. I have been struggling with my emotions, and feel so alone. We have also been trying unsuccessfully to become pregnant again. I am trying to discover my spirituality, and find meaning in my life.

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  • XHollowXEyesX
    March 10, 2007
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    this is a very touching piece, there is so much emotion behind it.
    thankyou for entering


  • redmarkonthewall
    March 2, 2007

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    Touching

    This is a well written and touching poem. It is deep and powerful. I am sorry for your loss and wish you all the best. Thank you for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck!


  • FallenAngel09
    March 2, 2007

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    Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I love the way you used the sea and ship's as a metaphor, it was brilliantly executed and seemed to drip with emotions. Great job and good luck.

    Your Host,
    Tiphanie


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    March 2, 2007

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    This is a brilliantly written poem and I completely love the use of metaphors and imagery to enhance the whole experience.

    Glad to have you here at AP and please feel free to contact me or any online Greeter if you need assistance here at AP.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • Random Thoughts
    March 1, 2007

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    Really found a lot I related to in this piece, you have a lot to offer the written world, I loved the wording and metaphors, a very dark and beautiful poem that i really enjoyed,
    Thanks for sharing,
    Best of luck in my contest,


    Brenden


  • LionessK silver member
    March 1, 2007

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    welcome to allpoetry

    There is so much in this write.. I can feel the emotion. I love the descriptions you chose to use here. Wonderfully flowing together like waves..
    I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing with us all.


    ~Kristy


  • She burns
    March 1, 2007

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    Just so beautiful, deep and powerful, I'm so sorry to hear that your baby had died, It kills you so much...

    This poem is just so amazing in everyway, how you use the with the struggle to be alive.....
    The hope, beauty and light that it gives, The way, the heart of each and every one of us....
    It's like a memorable story too to me

    Just so very creative, from the heart and soul of you

    I wish you all the best, joy and happiness again for you....

    Antonio

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