sundaymorningtrain
easy travelers
shorten their distance
Please tell me what you think
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Splendid
I love this form of poetry and the way you've kept the first line bunched together is a good device - your comments to Sam noted. Nice one.
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hey
wow...short...sweet...simple...awesome. it seems simple by its length but with a greater meaning behind it. awesome job. ♥
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mission accomplished...
how long do those who must go, go without end? Train tracks and epoxied brilliance in this short piece that covers the distance with ease.
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I like this very much. I don't much care for sunday morning train being all as one word. Maybe you have a reason for that, but I enjoyed the read anyway.
Sam
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Hi Sam, the reason for the one word is that it is rolling and ads to the feeling of shortening in the different ways, as it may be understood in this verse.
thnx for the compliment -
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ahh, very clever use of combining the words. It does a lot to add to the depth of the poem, especially since it is so slow and every letter and space counts for a large piece of the imagery.
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