Thawed anger beneath the heart,
The scent of betrayal from the start.
My hatred conceivable, untreated,
Bleeding from sanity that bellows the scars.
Clench through the fist and fury,
Loneliness that sets upon misery pain,
My heart without love, needed,
Left alone the mild darkness,
My life is yours to take.
Stabbed in between concealed rote,
Haunted by memories that lead into thousands,
A tear that won’t be forgotten,
The tear that rendered myself.
Enhance the deadly howls,
As more blades drench in blood,
The abundance of sins slowly arrives,
As dead fowl lies on earth,
Frolicking the hungers of human flesh.
Frozen hearts sets upon the moon,
No breath adjust upon warmth,
Not a single moral towards meaning,
You left me with nothing,
But with the days of raping my soul.
Author notes
Option 1!
Truth of death, of course doesn't mean what it says. It isn't just the truth of death, it's the truth of all, hanging, suicide attempts, drinking some sort of chemical, being savagely torn apart, all that good stuff. You must write about one of them, and I don't care which as long as it doesn't take me forever to figure out which one you did.
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Author Comment:
My option relates upon newly heart-broken online relationship....how the anger thrust in strive to no place on earth to live like everything is disaster to the life.
Well, since it's about love torn appart, and I asked the judge about it, I guess it's okay.
DEATHY LOVE TORN APPART POEM! Yay!
A contest entry
- Truth Of Death -updated again-? by Claudia Incognito.
390 points, ended March 14, 2007, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 1st Contest - Invite only! by Flawless Voice.
320 points, ended March 7, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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well done this is great, ur awsume at poems keep it up hun, keep it up :
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wow thats pretty awesome, i wish i could be that good, i got all kinda of mental images and all that <33
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DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!thats deep. dark gothicy. its good.
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wow this is an awesome poem the image the words give is so strong, it strikes a chord within me. if you don't mind i'm going to add this to my list.
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now that is heart broken
feller you need a person to love and one who will love you all the same -
"But with the days of raping my soul"
That ending line struck me deeply in describing the ongoing torment that memories can bring. *sigh* Such heart ache and misery in being so harshly lacerated in your heart by the blade of a trusted lover. The pain of abandonment is so darkly desplayed here in the depths of such sulken shadows. So painfully beautifully well done. This poem deserves a
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To Grimlathak
Thank you for stopping by.You are the first one to mention my last line of the last stanza, with great depth and understanding, which I hoped that someone would. And yes, the last line was to complete my emotions as towards the rest of the poem, to describe how painful it was to even let someone break my heart at my most sadden moments of my life. But most people wouldn't really know not a single moment of my life had been very cheerful...
But...I'm, very grateful for you to stop by and comment on my piece of work
It's great to know that my poems make people realise how I felt back then or maybe even now so...
Thank you for the rose and take care,
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amazing
As I have always said you have been a better poet..this poem has just left me..wow it is amazing, i loved it it is interesting and dark, my favourite plate 
I wish that the suffering never happened though..but hey without it the swee words embeded in this page wouldnt of been written and I wouldnt be talking to you as we speak
Love ya sis
TK
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This poem is amazing! The last line was sooo powerful it pretty much left me speechless..
Awesome write!
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Haha, thank you for taking your time in reading and commenting this piece. I'm glad you like it.
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i like it...its dark...
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