You mean so much, possibly everything.
So when I do these things, what does it mean?
Disgrace, shame, acts of wrong,
Pushing you away until you are gone.
Guilt throws my stomach, I cannot eat,
And when I see you, your eyes I can't meet.
Gross thoughts pull me underneath the light,
Putting my mind in the dark, thinking thoughts unright.
With every action I make, I move down the wrong road,
Weighed down more and more by each added load.
You're following my trail, trying to bring me back
And your soul is torn with each demon's attack.
Go back, leave me to my misery.
It's too late now, you just can't help me.
I know that you cared, I know how you tried
And how when you failed, you broke down and cried.
You can't save everyone, you can't do it all.
In this world, some of us are just meant to fall.
I'm lost, confused, can't be found.
Became beyond responsive to your sound.
Screams to whispers to nothing at all,
Soon I cannot even hear your broken calls.
Trees shift and my exit is barricaded.
Now I've no choice of the path I was persuaded.
Another weary step, into the dark I trudge.
From right and wrong, I can no longer judge.
Through the mist, I disappear:
Consumed by Sin, dropped into Fear.
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Part of a series I think I've just begun. Look for others.
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In this world, some of us are just meant to fall.
I'm lost, confused, can't be found.
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Wow! This is so great! I'm going to read so more!
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I'm almost speachless. This made my eyes water, a tear nearly fell. That's all I can say.
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I love it Nick. Very interesting. So deep, deeper then an endless abyss that one of poe's characters almost fell into himeself. You're rhyming is always awesome, never forced, always comes out smoothe like. Loved this piece, truely unique. Can't wait to read more of this series. Keep writing from within Nick.
See you around the deep end
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wow i really really really like that a lot and i can totally relate to it... its all good... heh.. i just didnt like the part where it said "Screams to whispers to nothing at all,
Soon I cannot even hear you at all" because of the rhyme of all and all.. but whatever its doesnt take away from the awesomeness of the poem as a whole.. hehe..
<3Emily
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Oh, this is wonderful! I think a series would be a great idea! Very interesting. When i read this it reminds me of so many things. Painful and unavoidable. This reminds me of a play in my own life except I'm a different character. not the one feeling all that. The one trying to help with no avail. It's a very long story. But this was a great write, i loved that it reminded me of my own events in my life, even if they weren't all that good, lol. i really did like this! Looking forward to more.
The Dreamer
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New series eh? Delightful
Fine piece, and here once again you go with the rhyming, it's nice. Mainly because you can do it so well, that the piece just flows with it, rather than causing a break in the coarse of the poem.
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