Impatient fingernails - tap
racing the shifts of moment.
Inert limbs -
shackled by a throbbing
subconscious,
imitate the potent sighs.
And sour squints
dribble ants,
as itchy scrapes
vibrate the mucky board.
Silence -
perplexed jaws.
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- ANYTHING! by DelaneyDisaster.
300 points, ended April 2, 2007, 176 entries
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This poem is lovely
Your poetry has class and style, eloquently written. You have done a great work here!
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Golden
silence whether in sounds or hounds takes the form of gilt edge ,especially gold.
while sounds tell sentences
silence speaks volumes.
poetry as a part of it glitters with glow.
This poem is really no exception
purush -
I love the nails tapping in impatience...it puts a really good image in the reader's mind and sets the tone for the rest of the poem. I can't say I understood it well though.
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Well written and very descriptive. I enjoyed the write alot and it said so much with so few words. Thank you for sharing this.
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There in that void without words and nails drumming in anticipation or bored waiting perhaps in anger and the rage builds or waiting for a verbal response the atmosphere is set we, the reader will only take what we want onf the day and how we view a poem depends on many factors. This poem stands alone in the imagery of the silence You allow the thoughts to mellow and linger while the image builds. To the focus which is there in the ending so strong the silence Thank you for the pleasure of the read.
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Intresting!
Wow, this poem has a very heavy feel to it, I love it. It captures the idea of impatience and waiting quite well, it has a slow pace to it, holding you back and making you wonder. Very nicely done, keep it up!
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