What happened, my dear friend, to us?
It wasn't supposed to be like this.
I wanted to remain cold and hollow.
Lonely and lost, so dead inside, forever.
I tried so hard to stop the fall
But found that nothing could be done
To hold back the inevitable
But such feelings, one cannot hide.
Time and again, I fall for you
And I wish that I couldn't feel anymore.
But I can feel this heart of ice melting
Beating again, when you hold me in your arms.
And when you touch me, my soul comes alive.
My heart no longer breaking to bleed.
My scars are healed, my sins absolved
As I lay, safe in your arms, this night.
The words are on the tip of my tongue
[I love you, with all of me]
But I dare not speak them aloud
For who shall hear me, when I call for you?
But the voice in my head is screaming out
Calling to my frigid heart.
For I know not what draws me to you
What,within this lifeless soul, has stirred?
I feel you, my love, in the cold, night air
As you make your presence known to me.
In my dreams, you speak the words
And I would die to hear them again.
I pray that the silence break me not
And let me find the courage to answer.
Let my words bleed forth unto your heart.
[I love you more than you will ever know].
For I had forgotten what it meant to feel
And leave this numbness behind at last.
Let the blackness fade to light
Unchain my soul, and lead me to the end.
Author notes
Option 3
"I'm sorry for getting attached. That isn't what it was supposed to be... I just wanted to tell you that I loved you."
That's what he said.
This is for my friend Travis, the one I think I might love back. We started out as friends, then it became a physical thing before the emotions got involved. I know that I care about him a lot, but I've been hurt too many times, and I'm scared to end up in the same position again. I know that he's been hurt too, and I'm so scared of hurting him... I just wish I could take it and run with it.
Based on the song, "Over and Over", by Three Days Grace, but with a slightly more Evanescence feel to it. Enjoy!
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600 points, ended January 23, 2008, 26 entries
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as i read this i just wanted the tears to fall so so hard...
i've got this guy who i love more than anything and we dated for three weeks before he was just so stuck between me and his crazy ex...he went back to her...but he didnt want to break up...but its like he had to...to me he seems less happy. always moody, very sarcastic...but before when we were together...he just seemed so wow...he had this glowing feeling about him. i'd hate to put the whole thing on me but thats just a feeling. anyway recently i poured my soul and said...i've lvoed you since i was in the 7thgrade...and i still do..in a friendship way and in others...
i say all this to say that...this really spoke to my heart...and not many people can do that lately...everyones so caught up in the whole "baby i need you i want you i'll die without you" mess that its just odd...and uncomfy to read...
wow i just can't believe someone could hit so close to home!....hmm just a minute ago i was thinking about our past relationship...*Tear* brings a happy one to my eye everytime
thanks so much for enteringi really loved this...so much
Dani♥
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i love this!
wow i love this poem it has alot of emotion and the passion is definetly evident. i love this alot i love the way it just seems to mesh so perfectley together and this is exactley what i wanted in my conteset. i mean this is just perfect the emotion is real and true and definetly there. great job
this is my favorite line
"But I can feel this heart of ice melting
Beating again, when you hold me in your arms."
i love this part because i can definetly relate to it i mean i think every1 can just because i think everyone has a person who in there life has completley changed who they are (in a good way) so i absolutley love this poem and thank you for entering ... good luck -
wow, the passion is out standing.
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how come this was removed?
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I wasn't sure if it fit or not. I might add it back in, though.
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Aww this is beautiful and wonderful and all those other words describing how amazing this is. It's so sweet and sad. Emotions are soooo complicated and we basically have no control over them. I really love this.
xx
~Stephanie~
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I feel you, my love, in the cold, night air
As you make your presence known to me.
In my dreams, you speak the words
And I would die to hear them again.
Do not be scared.You might just let the love of your life pass you by.
It's always worth the risk. -
"I wanted to remain cold and hollow
Lonely and lost, so dead inside, forever."
"Let my words bleed forth unto your heart"
You should remember that your objective is to write a love poem and that just doesnt help it. and i cant imagine why u would want to stay like that. An it shouldnt hurt that your word are coming out "bleed" is not the right word it symbolizes pain intstead of glee but this poem does well in the rest of its stanzas, it asserts ur love. A nice poem that could get better with some tweeking. -
speechless much
this was great. I know the song "Over and Over" and wow...part of me is going through something similar right now...i don't blame you chica. I really feel for you. It had real power and pain and love-- right along with everything else. good luck.
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Beautiful!
I absolutely loved it! It's very emotional and beautiful! i love it! and i also love the song it's based on! lol! :-P
"And when you touch me, my soul comes alive.
My heart no longer breaking to bleed.
My scars are healed, my sins absolved
As I lay, safe in your arms, this night." I really like this stanza! great write! i loved it! keep it up! -
The emotion is very raw and deep. You create vivid images as well. Good poem
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