The birds were all lined up on the telephone wires
They were waiting for Woodstock, the concert,
The first to the wire had backstage passes
The last had to all sit in the dirt
Anticipation was a buzzing in the air
For The Budweiser Frogs were going to croak,
Scalpers were perched all over the place
Selling tickets even to the broke
The Budweiser Frogs were in town for the concert
The Geico Lizard was their back up band,
They were famous throughout the circuit
And animals were coming from all over the land
The trout were getting prettied up backstage
Scales, was the fashion of the night,
The man in the moon watched through binoculars
See he had the best seat, big and bright
The Thunderbirds were first on the stage
Chirping, squawking, trout dancing the twist,
The mosh pit was full to the brim
Smokey The Bear was on duty to assist
The Cardinals were chirping as backup singers
The woodpecker was pecking his bass drum,
A crane was playing an upright bass
Miles and miles they had flown from
A tuna was plucking a salmon colored Les Paul
The Minnows sang backup for this band,
A swordfish plunked away on the keyboards
And a squirrel sang, it was heard throughout the land
Weird, this congregation of critters
Had come together for this concert to be,
And then there was one more awesome act
The curtains opened, Jessica Simpson sang with The Chicken of The Sea
Author notes
WRITTEN 6/2/2006
I haven't a clue where this one came from! I guess due to my husband's band.
POETDONTKNOWIT
option #8
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i have added this to the finalists lait thanks for sharing.
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Weird ending. Funny poem. Thanks for entering.
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A very enjoyable and fun poem to read, but we felt that the rhythm was not consistant enough, but thank you for your entry.
Please consider an entry in the final contest, you may enter two poems, new writes only. We look forward to reading more from you.
Sue and Jeff
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hahah, what?
this was fun and I enjoyed it a lot.
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Wow what a concert, and Jessica Simpson showed up!!!
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Fun!
This poem has lots of cute images and the rhymes are clear. It has the surreal quality of one of those old 1930s cartoons where the normal stuff is animals playing instruments, but then there's some really weird stuff going on....
This poem doesn't really try to achieve a meter. If it did, it might sound something like this:
The Budweiser Frogs were in town for the concert
With Charlie the Tuna on keyboards and bass.
Their fame had preceded them, everyone loved them!
The creatures streamed in from all over the place.
It's possible that as you wrote this, you heard a beat in your head that accompanied the poem, and as you recite it you adjust the speed of certain words so that they arrive on the correct beat (like a rap song). Unfortunately, I can't hear the beat that you hear - if you want the meter to be consistent, it has to be built into the language.
I know this is a prewrite, so I wouldn't change it, but for this contest you might consider writing a new poem with the goal of matching the meter to the creatures.
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cutely funny
I love animals. And this is so cute! I think my favorite part of course would be the last line. LOL Jessica Simpson, nice. I believe that the randomeness of this poem is what makes it the funniest! Great job!
Ashley
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LOL i love the last line
best of luck in all your contests
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Thank you for the entry... I come up with random ideas for poems sometimes and it's just an 'idea' which just comes out and flows alright in the end.
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this was a good write..different from most of the dark poetry that most write...this was very different and had a great flow to it and was descriptive as well..keep writting our very talented
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Haha this was such a humorous poem! It was cute and I love the image you set in my head, which you did brilliantly - you really brought animals to life in this one. And the Jessica Simpson quote at the end just rounded it off with the same humour. =P What sort of band is your husband in? (just curious) Good luck in the contest <3
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I just love your poetry, you've got incredible talent in the way you write poetry, they always give the feel of telling a story. Awesome job!.... how many poems did you enter?....lol. Thanx for the entry.
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Awesome
I thought this was awesome the first just made me want to read more.I like lines 8,10, and then 31,32. actualy i liked the whole thing.well i never heard a animal band. but i have heard the frogs making sounds. crickets doing their thing. ducks quacking. so guess is each doing his act.I really liked the title it caught my eye. the first line drew me in and lead me to read more I really enjoyed this.I'm going to bookmark this poem.I don't have any suggestions or anything to pull apart i just loved this poem. very nice.
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Classical comedy
Oh I needed a good laugh today. Another rainy day and all the blank stares it was nice to log on and have a laugh. Thanks for sharing!
Cheers
Darlin
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hahahhah..this is classic, kept seeing it in my mind...refreshing, thanks for the giggle today, I needed it!
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