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Raggedy Doll




I follow the moon along it's traverse
Finding my food along the way
I stole some clothes to cover my bones
And even found work for a single day

Finding my food along the way
In trash or gardens or a stranger's hand
I've forgotten what having toys is like
Worry only about survivals demands

In trash or gardens or a stranger's hand
My existance is not a happy one
Society threw me away long ago
I never knew why that deed was done

My existance is not a happy one
I'm little more than a raggedy doll
with no place to go, no one that cares
My spirit and heart have long become pall

I'm little more than a raggedy doll
Invisible to most, or so it seems
Or, if noticed, an unwelcome sight
Invading the beauty of their rose-colored dreams

Author notes

This system we have is in serious trouble and we look oft to blame the victims. Children are on the streets and we are not helping them, we are ignoring them or telling them to help themselves... these are CHILDREN: our future! Do you think they seem angry and mistrutful? OF COURSE... WE let them down when we should have been protecting and helping them. OK, off the box I go.

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  • Gratitude
    March 25
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    Strong words, and well expressed. Well done

    God bless!

  • Raven Judge
    July 27, 2007
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    Heh.. funny stuff: I entered the same contest that this picture was used for... either that or it is a particularly popular picture. Either way, small world. I think I won the gold, actually... hummm.

    Anyway, I have to agree with my fellow judge. This effort is definitely a contender. Well done.

    Thank you for your entry.

    ~Das


  • earthstar
    June 6, 2007

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    The power of your imagery speaks volumes. Very creative way to voice your feelings. The flow is very good. This is a sad fact that many of our children and adults go hungry in our home land. I am glad you left the notes in your author box to help. The reader to understand what is behind the meaning of this write.

    Creativity 20/20
    Imagery 20/20
    flow 20/20
    metaphor 20/20
    Lasting impact 20/20

    Very well done

    100/100


  • myorama
    March 23, 2007

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    Very Powerful

    This is a wonderful poem. Very powerful and touching. Children are on the streets all over the world. Instead of things getting better they are only getting worse. I hope that all of us who have read this poem are somehow moved to help some child in some way.


  • LittleAnn
    February 26, 2007

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    This is such a powerful write, getting across the emotions such a child might have very well. I hope that m,any read this poem as it holds so much truth, and I wish you success in the contest!
    Keep up the great work!
    Annie

  • LIve For Today
    February 26, 2007
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    a powerful poem


  • tawk gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    Wow this is such a powerful and so true of society write. I could feel this little girls pain. I had tears in my eyes as I read your poem. Excellent flow. Good luck in my contest.

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