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Revenge

The rain falls like a tear
Rolling down your face
Dripping off you chin
At a fast steady pace

Coming from your eyes
That shine like a star
Calling to your heart
Saying you’re never too far

Black clouds gather
And there's no where to go
And the creature rises up
From the other world below

But even when trapped
You find a way to grin
And already knowing
You could never repay your sin

You walk forward smiling
Caring the hunger to kill
Barring your fangs and claws
Walking through the battlefield

The creature looks down to you
As the rain starts to fall once more
And you charge forward yelling to him
"I have someone I’m killing for"

You close your eyes and cry
As you stand covered in blood
With your eyes closed you tell him
"You took the one I love

Her eyes were very bright
And smile was very sweet
She was innocent and pure
To everyone she meets

She was always kind
And always brave
Never scared
And never ran away

You took her life
For no reason at all
And once that happened
Then came your downfall

Why did you take her
Now she's gone for good
When I told you my sin
I though you understood

This has been great
I really had fun
But now that you’re dead
My revenge is done
~Kay~

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  • Razor-Blade Romance
    June 1, 2007
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    This is a strange but powerful poem.
    Well done !


  • thorlorn thanatos
    February 26, 2007
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    This is an odd poem. I liked the start however the middle-end is strange and confused me. The end kind of cleared little bits up but still...
    I like the idea of the poem though, even thought im not sure i totally understand

    Good luck
    Ryan