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Unwise man

there was an old man in Vazhore
whose remarks made us sore
he thought 'I am wise'
we thought 'He is unwise'
foolishly he remained a bore

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  • james119
    May 31, 2008

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    Itt is usually best not to think of oneself as wise. Others will quickly tire of the arrogance.
    Advice given for one's self aggrandizement will be ineffectual and hollow.

    I quite like the story

  • aqua -rius
    May 15, 2007

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    Good poem

    There appears to be a conflict, possibly gender based,
    between the unwise 'bore' and 'we'.You have made a good Limeric of that.

  • Just4u
    March 12, 2007

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    Your perfect limerick will be based on a syllable count
    of 8-8-5-5-8 syllables

    So as an example if we apply that to yours here
    we could come up with this without to much changing.

    there was an old man from Vazhore 8
    whose remarks did made us quite sore 8
    he thought 'I am wise 5
    but it's no surprise 5
    of his words we don't want no more 8


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    Well doen and very clever at the same time. Fits limerick rules well!
    Thanks so much for your entry and good luck.
    Gayene