~Reality~

I wish I could tell her perhaps she can read

my thoughts,

I see how she flirts with all the wealthy men

thinking this is my ticket,

She is so young so beautiful yet filled with

misconceptions,

I wish she could see by the paleness of

my skin the weariness of my eyes and

the fact I sit alone,

That I was once her but now fragile

my bottle of xanax my soul companion

now forgotten for another meeting which

only means a mistress.

Author notes

This is not written for all, but truly for a lot.

A challenge by Lavender Butterfly. 390 points, ended February 27, 2007, 15 entries
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Lavender Butterfly
February 27, 2007

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A very expressive piece, laced with thought and sincere emotion. Thanks so much for sharing. Love and light, Butterfly.
debilynn
February 26, 2007
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a fantastic write! the rhythm is smooth, and the message is clear. you did a fantastic job with this! i beleve i have been in both places here. this is a pleasure to read, God bless you always
Molassis
February 26, 2007

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Chilling write Tearz... I think you've gotten out of the picture what's really in there... an exceptional job on this for sure!

You write so well using the free verse form, it flows so well, not choppy or 'cut' but goes along quite smoothly!

Best wishes to you in this contest... I'm thinking it's a winner... at least in my opinion anyway! Well done on this!!

~Melissa
Forgotten truth
February 26, 2007

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Well this certainly says more than its physical words.love the story,, and i was thinking before i got to the end that this was the same person
Sandygram
February 26, 2007

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Wonderful Poem
Hello Frozentearz, Your poem really describes the picture quite well. The loneliness of both women is reflected in your words. Your imagery was terrific. A lovely poem and a pleasure to read. You take care. Many Blessings to you my friend.

Sandy