Sitting all alone in here
But a company from the waiter
Lost in thoughts of my mind
Still she asks me from behind
"Is there anything I could do for you"
And I ponder if you could bring me
Life without all the blues...
A contest entry
- A challenge by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended February 27, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i think we all would want that, but the truth of the matter is we can't have it, but we can control how long it last, you did a great job on this keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Excellent Piece
this was most excellent and very understanding .... If there really is waiter that can do what you are asking.. Please send them my way ...
Yvonne
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Wonderful
This is just lovely. wonderfully written and expressed great job my friend.
*Go with God* my friend,
Aunt Valerie
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Those last two lines made me sit up and take notice. This could even be shortened to add more of an impact, as it speaks volumes towards the end. Thanks for sharing... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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