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Poem - The perfect poem - Sonnet

 

I need a poem that flows like rivers wild
Choose perfect words that match each one in line
I tap my feet until the sound is right
And in the end I'll call this stanza mine

Now that I got the first one off my chest
I struggle with this stanza number two
My muse has left and told me to my face
"A perfect rhyme is just too much for you

You write a language that's not even yours
And miracles don't happen every day"
I said "I know, but still I want to try
So off you go, I'll write in my own way"

And here I am, but perfect I am not
Right from my heart, because that's all I've got


Ode to Winter

When Autumn ends his glorious colour bright
And all the leaves have fallen to the ground
While trees are bending naked in moon's light
The song of Winter makes a tinkling sound

All shades are dimmed to white and greyish blue
And hail will struck the fruits still in their sleep
The soil is bare where once the poppies grew
While weeping willows just can't stop to weep

And suddenly the world has disappeared
In layers of a blanket cotton like
The gutters seem to've grown an icy beard
From darkened clouds the lightening will strike

In the serenity of Winter's cold
Green shades of Spring awaken to unfold

 

 

 

 

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  • ms-cuddles
    October 28, 2007
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    I Enjoyed Both

    Both poems were very good but I did like the first better. It amused me so. The second had alot of imagery and the picture haunted me for I don't like the winter but I loved the fact that you did give me some hope with the last line. Thanks for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles


  • xandercheerios
    February 26, 2007

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    I love it, another sonnet... this one has perfect beats! I kinda hoped it was shakespearean, with your first and third lines rhyming... oh well. And I love your short convo with your muse. I wonder if you can write a second verse to this sonnet? I think it could be really awesome! Either way, good job, good luck in the contest.


    • JustADutchie gold member
      February 26, 2007

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      Thank you

      Thanks for the lovely uplifting comment. I hope you like the second verse to this sonnet. This time it's a Shakespearian sonnet, a gift from my muse, because you like them.

      • xandercheerios
        February 27, 2007
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        Well, can you thank your muse from me? It sure is a treat to get a sonnet as a gift!

        And this sonnet, magnifico! Perfect rhythm, I love you including poppies and weeping willows, very nice images of them not weeping anymore...

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