Loud Music, Crowded Club.
Water is sold,
Instead of alcohol.
Ectasy is not a thing of the past,
If you know the right people,
Then you'll get the right goods.
Dehydration is the fear,
Drink water and be free,
I Can Lose Control.
It's not until my heart,
Beats with the Bass,
That the music is noticed and embraced.
Smoke comes from the floor,
Satan has come up to Enjoy,
With all of us in our Sin.
Lights come from above,
God has come down to Appreciate,
All of us in our Bliss.
I am in perfect control,
The others however have problems,
Their faces are all clouded.
I've looked into Medusa's eyes,
Her eyes are amazingly beautiful,
But I found myself staring at her breast.
The convivial at Sodom and Gomorrah,
Is a memory of a broken party,
Nothing compared to what happens now.
Satan dances to my left,
God dances to my right,
And Ra watches me with a smile.
Author notes
I am sluha and I choose option 2 substance abuse,
so yeah I think that people think that Xtais is no more, but in reality it is. I guess there is a misconceoption that weed and cocaine are the best drugs out there...
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Deep
i like how descriptive yet cryptic this piece is. Great imagry, i loved how you incorporated god, satan, medusa, and ra. Amazing flow, and great right.
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Wow
I am not going to preach to you with my comment because I have been there before and I have used more then I ever should have and it ruled me for a long time...So when I read this I could see myself in this picture and I felt relieved that I am not there anymore...It just blew my mind...
Thank you so much for sharing this powerful write
Much Love
Tessa -
I really like this..I like how you describe the party scene...this is a really amazing poem
"It's not until my heart,
Beats with the Bass,
That the music is noticed and embraced."
Thats a beautiful line...good write...
Ashlee -
Wow i love this! I felt like this the other night. Where you take notice of every single feeling. And for once all you think about is yourself
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YOU USED RHYME!!!!!!
i'm so proud, though i havent been here for a while so i imagine this is not the first time. congrats on your trophies by the way.. -
YOU USED RHYME!!!!!!
i'm so proud, though i havent been here for a while so i imagine this is not the first time. congrats on your trophies by the way.. -
YOU USED RHYME!!!!!!
i'm so proud, though i havent been here for a while so i imagine this is not the first time. congrats on your trophies by the way..
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This poem really confused me... I couldn't stay focused; and the like "satan" and fantasy/medievel w/e theme really caught me off guard. It's nicely written though, good job.
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Wow
Ecstasy! Woot lol haha. Great poem I love it a ton. Awesome perspective and everything. I love this poem
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33 -
lol i agree weed and cocaine are not the best drugs out there! id say lsd is my favorite but im a fan of hallucinations! thanx for entering again i like this one the best out of the others ♥
*Abused * -
I see how substance abuse played into this.
I loved the heaven and hell mixture type thing.
And how you threw Ra in at the end.
Awesome.
~SweetAmber~
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I know what you're talking about... and as you know I can't reallt say I agree. It's scary but sounds pretty awesome, danger triggers exitment, and movement in the body, or whatever. You start it off well
"Water is sold,
Instead of alcohol."
I had to think though, and I tried to really read the piece. I'll get better at that. Looking at it made me find more and more things, I remembered stuff too. It's a good piece!
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