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As seasons change

Fears fade,

as seasons change,

 

Spring steals my fatasy,

and fills my head with new bright light,

My ears are softened by the first singing birds,

 

Summer makes my thoughs mellow,

Like the fluffy clouds,

while they willingly let the sun shine through,

 

Autumn rain washes away my sorrow,

The storms mess up the world outside,

but in my head the whirling orange and brown calms me down,

 

Winter always takes to long,

It makes the time freeze,

with the icy wind and blinding snow,

 

Then spring steals my dreams again,

and my fears fade,

as seasons change,

 

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Thanks for this contenst... I really love the picture

Love Lily

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  • Breathe-Gray
    August 13, 2007

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    Moving...

    This poem moved me... I despise cliche, but it truly did... It lifted me from my melancholy, if only briefly... You have a real power with metaphor.

    Keep writing...


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    July 15, 2007

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    Really nice. Good write. The seasons do effect us so. Mentally, and emotionally, but we need this imbalance to keep us balanced.


  • I-Am-Custard
    March 30, 2007
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    Typo alert: it's 'fantasy', not 'fatasy'... 'thoughts', not 'thoughs'... 'winter takes TOO long', and you shouldn't end on a comma.

    This poem is quite good other than the typo, a bit stereotypical inways, and it also lacks 'punch', but it's alright.

    Thankyou for entering


  • debilynn gold member
    February 28, 2007
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    wonderful! thank you for entering