In the shadows
I sit and yearn for your return
In the shadows
Day after day my longing grows
Doubt in my heart and soul does churn
Will the fire of our love still burn
In the shadows
Author notes
Option 3.
In a list
A contest entry
- CHOOSE ONE LINE by piccola.
450 points, ended March 4, 2007, 13 entries
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The rondelet is just not one of my favorite poetic forms. I don't care for the repetition of "in the shadows" three times. The entire poem comes off as cliche with the yearning and the longing and the fire of love.
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can you explain to me what a roundlet is. I have never heard of it.
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I think you mean "the fire of 'our' love, but good write and thank you so much for entering.
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