Rivulets of aquatic beauty
Moving with fluidity
And perfect motion
In not quite straight lines
Racing each other
In the hopes of reaching
Another surface
...first...
Beauty knows no boundaries
Perfection knows no mercy
Sadness, inevitable
Author notes
supposed to symbolise tears
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I like the tear concept
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in all of nature there are the fittest and the weakest struggling in an endless fight to be on the top, some are devoured in the process, others devour,
in the end of each days race, the lucky have reached the pinnacle on the broken backs of those who failed. then of course the night races begin, where even the chance for passion with another can be wound up with you on top, or her on top, or you walking home alone, or her sitting in a small one bedroom walkup, with no arms to run joyously into. the world is a stream of conciousness, and we all flow within it trying to make others aware that we exist, This explains poetry, a primordal scream, a verbal scratch on the cave walls in the cranium of society. We are not content to fail to reach the top, we go kicking and screaming all the way to the bottom, so that all can hear and benefit from our thoughts along the way. great poem...thanks for sharing...Artis -
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wow........... thanks for your awesome comment, i had to reread it a few times to actuallly absorb it all. thanks again. take care XxX
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Beautiful and bittersweet at the same. This piece just flows from one line to another. A very well written poem. Blessings. Debby
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thankyou for your comment, i wish you much happiness. XxX
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Yes, sadness is inevitable...otherwise happiness would be unrecognizable. This is a beutifully written poem.
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thankyou for your comment, it is appreciated. take care XxX
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