Precious tear that hangs
On the lashes that moment
Too long
Like Silence
Holds possibilites
Suspended
Please tell me what you think
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"silence holds possibilities"...that could have so many meanings. i'm trying to figure it out.
you should call this poem "suspended", unless the title is "untitled". -
Thank you for your comment, I see what you mean and I'll try it out. 'm not sure about the stronger words though. I think part of the meaning lies in its uncertainty although i suppose stronger words might make it more memorable.
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Hmm... maybe consider changing "that" in line 2 to "a" ... the poem is good though. Might want to add some stronger words to make it more memorable. Good poem though. I liked i
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