Ten years, they said, no more
the highly modified wheelchair
her only mobility
molded to her
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t
and shrivelled form
our gentle touch
her only communication
Author notes
Ten lines only.
A contest entry
- More titles by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended February 26, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lots of emotions and imagery came with these lines a whole story told in a few lines, such pain came across me... Congrads on the HM!!! P.S. you've been Hood-Winked by the Poetic Bandits
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Such a sad way to have to live your life. A very touching and emotional write. I could feel her pain. Great flow and content.
You have just been Hood-Winked!
I hope that you have such a wonderful day!
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This touched my heart wholey and completely... such a cruel blow to lead such an existance... but they are blessings in every way all the same.... wonderful piece, worthy of more than the 3 clappy hands I am allowed
Karen
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I think you mean modified. I will overlook that mistake as your poem is amazing and holds such emotion and vivid imagery. An excellent piece of writing penned in excellent form. Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in my contest... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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Thank you!
Firstly, thank you for the HM...so happy this little piece brought some dignity to the kids with whom I work.
Secondly, I apologise profusely for the spelling error ~ I'm usually very pernickety about such things, but we've got problems with our connection (phone and broadband) at the moment, and the wretched line keeps cutting out, generally when I'm right in the middle of adding a poem! There comes a point when you simply give up re-connecting!
Anyway, thanks again ~ and to all who helped with my mistake
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Powerful piece, modified?
These wheelchair bound people are quickly becoming an everyday occcurence in society as medical advances not only give them life, but allow them the mobility you speak of. Great poem and good luck
Jim
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Midified
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The very depths of compassion. So tenderly expressed. Ten lines of poetic perfection with a final couplet to paint the afection and devotion. Empathy in harmony. Nicely written, Lou
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