Eighty unfaced days,
Eighty breaking ways,
Eighty wasted nights,
Eighty unforgotten sights.
This will always stay,
Because men don’t cry,
Because it was her day,
Now who else will die?
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80 days as of February 25...
Please tell me what you think
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I think they count as rhymes...
and intense short piece ...powerful, in spite of it's ambiguity... sad, dark, beautiful and stated rather plainly for any one who wanted to read the honesty that this piece contains...
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Wow. this is really sad. It's pretty secretive, too. It really makes me think, what happened 80 days ago? at the same time, I don't really need to know to get the poem.
Great rhythm, too!
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I quite like this
It's a simple, brief insight into someone else's world. Makes you wonder just what happened eighty days ago and opens a whole world of speculative possibilities.
Or something like that.
I also liked the "This will always stay, because men don't cry" bit. Maybe it's just because I remember being told to "Be a man and stop crying". Anyway, I'm going to stop rambling and let you get on with your life now.
Later Days
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i like this poem.. good job, hun!! i was wondering..is it about a certain someone? hope you're doing well
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