Pain swallows you
it rips you apart
yet by days end
you preserve your heart.
A contest entry
- Fragments of our Soul [5] by Ryno.
300 points, ended March 2, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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how cute this one was. Pain, sure does eat those, who allow themselves to be consumed by it! I took your third line to be what time so lovingly gives to us...healing. Only through that, can things begin to feel better and 'normal.'
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Sometimes it astounds me that there is any heart left to preserve. Great write. Pain is a pretty potent muse. Keep up the great work!
-Nick
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this piece is pretty cool...I like that concisenessity [yea I made that word up] it's rather deep for fifteen words or less! most excellent write
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Thanks for entering. Very, very tragic and vibrant and lifeful. Wonderful. I wish you best luck in my contest - thanks.
~Ryan~
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