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Me

The old me
Has
.
  .
  .
  .
  .
  T
  r
  i
    c
    k
    l
    e
  d
    .
    .
  .
  .
Its dirty way back
Into my life
I guess this is
World War 1,2,3,4?

The old me
Has
.
  .
  .
.
S
  l
  i
  t
  h
  e
  r
  e
    d
    .
    .
  .
  .
.
Its disgusting habits
Right back through
The dark, neverending
Rabbit hole

&&Forever I am lost
  confused
    forgotten
  gone
in this cycle

Author notes

ug ug ug? Understand the language? No, thats because its primitive

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  • ConvenientExcuses
    February 24, 2007

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    wow!

    I really like this poem. the way you presented it was pretty awesome. I like the wording and imagery too! again, the ending was one of my favorite parts. you really do know how to make a lasting impression! Also, the line "The dark, neverending Rabbit hole" struck me as a favorite.
    overall I really liked this poem! great job! keep writing!
    *Jess*