please look at me intomy eyes before I go.
Ok look dont talk just listen to me then I will leave.
I could sit here all night and try to dissuade you but I wont.
We both know im a little dither tonight as I talk you can hear it in my voice.
Im glad you and im are working it out and getting back together for the baby.
You are a really great friend to me and I will always be a part of your life.
It was really fun while it lasted and it looked like I had a chance.
I see now that he can give you and your baby more than I will ever be able to.
You think all guys are the same, well im not the same as them all i still have flaws.
Im not the sharpest tool in the shed or the most used.
Still if you ever need me call me and I will give everything I can to help you.
Sorry that I made a disruption in your life. maybe you will forgive me.
I know that im a doofus and I probably never will mean much to people.
We both know that you dont like the military or anything.
I really think I need to go though even if I lose you as a friend.
For you for him for your baby. you three will always be in my thoughts and prayers.
That may be the one thing in life that not even I can mess up at.
No no, this is not a guilt trip just let me finish.
I never lied to you and im not going to start now.
Things happend between us I will never forget.
For the first time in a very long time i felt happy genuinly.
I guess what im really trying to say is that this is the hardest thing ive ever had to do.
I will miss you so much more than you know or I will let show.
Goodnight see you around sometime and may be talk to you later.
Author notes
Dissuade - To presuade not doing something.
Dither - To act nervously.
The hardest thing ive ever had to do in my life. actually made it back to my house before I started to cry. To look someone in the eye and try to pretend that you dont hurt at all and can walk away without feeling anything. that hurt more than what actually happend.
Please tell me what you think
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so sad
s for my AP bub!
I loved this
well done
luv dani -
I can see you are growing, William Rose
Your verse is gaining in dexterity, scope.
I suggest you revise this, as you have put emotional effort but you may find that it grows as you examine it, read it aloud to yourself, correct little things like punctuation and what not. It's your baby, this poem, so why not nurture it, tend to it? Towel her off and get her to neonatal. Listen to the nurse. She may give you a clue as just what to do.
If you have any time, read as much of this guy as you can stand:
http://www.pbs.org/wnet/ihas/poet/robinson.html
He is Edward Arlington Robinson, and he's one of the best American poets of the past century.
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I am sorry that you had to go through something like that ... that write made me want to cry myself ... I understand what it is like to have to say goodbye and not show anything ... but everything will be okay ... don't worry ... we all go through it ...
love you hunny
Chantelle -
I teared up as I read this William. I know it must have been heartbreaking for you to let her go. You did something very selfless and slowly walked away from someone that meant so much to you. I love your long sentences William. You know I am always here for you if you ever need to talk.
Love your friend,
Guin
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SHE'S DUMB AS HELL WILL and she will see that. I love you!
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Fantastic
This was ferociously touching. Beautiful, bare, deep feelings unmasked. I wish I had popcorn for this one.
I felt like this poured out of you stemmed from something personal maybe.
You are a good man whose brave heart will only mold you into a much admired warrior. Bravo!
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im sorry this has happened to you will. good poem though
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