Visions of yesterday
come to haunt me
Everything is shattered,
in pieces
The wind pushes through
my frail body as I try to
breathe it all in
Feeling a loss all around me
My total existence broken down
into fragments of what used to be
Nothing is solid, nothing is clear
bound to eternal suffering
Speak to me yesterdays,
Tell me why I am so forlorn,
despondent and full of despair
Tears stain my garment of gold
its glimmer dimmed with
my imperfections
In a list
A contest entry
- Photo Inspired by real irish rose.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I disagree. I see no imperfections. Loving is never an imperfection. If you love a soul, that soul is still perfect, even though the person carrying it is not. Those who love people first will always be miserable, but those who love God first will always have peace. It is a timeless message. Step back and see the big picture. It is a good time for you to do so. See what the spirit sees, and learn that it is not so bad after all. Three bunnies who are exactly what they seem.
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Very Good
You did well to capture the thought of this
Very well done
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Tell me why I am so forlorn,
despondent and full of despair
Tears stain my garment of gold
its glimmer dimmed with
my imperfections
Lovely
Rick
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Wonderful, as she is.......
A melencholy(spelling?) verse about someone who is confused? lost? Is afraid? as they face a new challenge
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A very beautifully written piece, this poem just captures the woman in the pictures emotions extremely well..this is my favourite part....
The wind pushes through
my frail body as I try to
breathe it all in
Feeling a loss all around me
My total existence broken down
into fragments of what used to be
Just beautiful...thankyou for entering and goodluck...julie
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"Tears stain my garment of gold
its glimmer dimmed with
my imperfections "
I love this line.
The whole piece was penned beautifuly.
keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing! Good luck in the contes
~Princess of Shadows~ -
Soo incredible...captures the picture magnificently....evokes such regret, remorse, sadness, despair...what imagery you have done here...Great job...good luck...you never cease to amaze me with your talent!
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