i'm called down to detention after school
the new princepal is very mad
i wonder what i could have done
i was never bad
i walk into the office
to see the guy is hot
i try to get those thoughts from my head
but realize that i cannot
he looks at me angerly
as i look at whose around
a beautiful woman so much prettier than me
jealously of her brings me down
the princepal doesn't say much to me
but my patience is wearing thin
if i were the one up there
i'd so never do this to him
but then i got to thinking
about me walking home
my legs ache just standing up
and i'd have to go alone
god, why can't i have a bigger book bag
that could carry all my things?
or maybe a limo
so my things it would bring?
the angry stares are giving me a headache
and it feels like the hot guy is getting more mad
i ask him, "well, what is it?"
and that's when things go bad
he says "well, i've looked at your record,
and where we are now helped out too,"
he pushes some kind of button,
"i've realized i can't help you"
i fall from where i was sitting
into a fiery pit
looking up i see angels
and god not happy a bit
i'm tossed into hell
and see those that had been lost
the seven sins had got us all
to be a normal kid, this was the cost.
Author notes
i have read the rules
i chose choice #2
A contest entry
- 7 Deadly sins by shattered logic.
505 points, ended March 16, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Its good sad, but good.poiuopopoo
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This was a neat take on the subject. "I don't know what I did, but it must have been bad." I likeses it lotses.
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Very well done,
This piece had a nice flow and rythem, it was well put together, and all seven were portrayed very well, I like how you made it surround you, well done good job and good luck!!!! :0
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omg samcuy!
you are a very talented poet! the Idea of appling the seven deadly sins to your every day life is just marvelus! i never would have thougt of it! ive read a couple of the others entries but yours realy takes the cake! not that i thought i had a chance befor but now im realy nervous! my absolute favorite part was the las 4 lines:
i'm tossed into hell
and see those that had been lost
the seven sins had got us all
to be a normal kid, this was the cost.
well i must applaud you bravo bravo
best of luck!
(tho im the one who seems to need it now)
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thanks!
coming from you that means so much!
AWSOME poem you wrote, seriously. you should be SO proud of your self. like you need the luck, you'll so win!
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