Thirteen candles in a ring
Flickering gently around me as I sit
And meditate to myself
A time to sit and look inside myself
I close my eyes and breathe deep
Music plays softly, the melody encircles me
As I drift away to the hidden land inside my heart
Twenty-seven dreams flutter like moths around my head
Each one a different shade of love
Each one carrying three golden words
The golden ‘I love you’ that you inscribed upon my heart
As you left me here alone
Thirty droplets of silver linked by love
Holding you close to me even when you’re far away
Keeping you inside my heart no matter of the distance
Seven days there’s yet to be
Before we can hold each other near
Before your embrace will kill this loneliness
And two hearts will finally beat
~ As one ~
Author notes
Angel ~ a poem about a long distance relationship.
This poem is dedicated to Dan ~ I miss you ~
A contest entry
- make me feel... make me care... show me reall emotion here!!! by AngelDreamer.
450 points, ended March 7, 2007, 18 entries
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Beautiful!
Thank you so very much for sharing this; it's absolutely gorgeous and I enjoyed the read immensely -
The begining doesnt sound like missing someone
27? was it a random number? haha no really I want to know....
I did that to they guy I'm with. I just left. yet mine is 2 days driving:0
very well done
thanks for entering
my co judge thats with me but not listed says she likes it alot that the last stanza says
And two hearts will finally beat
~ As one ~ -
Moving...
Wow...I loved how you used candles in your piece...it made it more mysterious....
Beautiful work all around!
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great poem good emotion and imigry thanks for entering
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aww...this is so sweet and loving. I loved it. this was great. keep it up
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Spectactular!!!
Excellent,. Indeed most excellent poem. I really love that raw energy and passion of your love that burns deep within you as you write about your loverboy and how much you miss him and lone to be with him. *sigh* I know how that feeling goes where I longed to be with Jen but *sigh* oh well who knows when that will ever happen. any ways Grrrrreat poem as always much enjoyed from the 1st line the title and to the end always enjoyable. I fwelt ackward through out the poem because when I read such mushy poetry like this makes me break down which I hate admitting LOL. any ways take care and have a good one
love tyour friend, Paul
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verry nicely written! im gunna have the other judge comment it to because iv looked at so many of the poems i dont know what to say becides its really well written and it shows emotion well. thanks for entering ill have the other judge comment
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