In leafy grove, one lovely day, I heard a flute sing near.
A sound that, like a serpent song, did sly ensnare my ear.
And at that sound I looked around, and was surprised to see...
There, through the trees, I saw someone, who danced alone for me.
He was a bonny, handsome lad, that almost was a man.
I knew beyond the slightest doubt that he was surely Pan.
Upon his flute of reeds he played, then smiled to draw me near,
his eyes so full of love for me that I could have no fear.
He sang, "Arise, come dance with me, my long awaited one!
For past is rotted with the weeds, and future not begun.
Eternity we hold, my love, in shining instant clear,
so let this grassy carpet be our bower and our bier."
We circled, laughing, o'er the grass, like flowers we did flow.
He caught his arm around my waist and then he laid me low.
He pressed his hand upon my breast, we kissed with lips afire,
and there upon that grassy sward I yielded to desire.
And now that I am grown quite old, and soon must go away,
my memories alone consist of but that bygone day.
And when I hear the lilt of flute or see a bonny man
I live again that lovely day, when once I danced with Pan.
A contest entry
- "make my heart swell" by second-born.
600 points, ended September 9, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Fantasy Element by ArchOblivion.
600 points, ended September 7, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Fairy Tale Fantasy!!! by A m b r e a.
800 points, ended September 11, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very well done!! I love the imagery and magic of this piece! It flowed effortlessly and kept my attention all the way through! Amazing write! Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Magnificent! Thank God, or human sense, or both that it has some appropriate hardware!
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Thank you for the dance with Pan - very much enjoyed.
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A well earned gold. Congratulations. Beautifully written. So olden and magical. I love the word usage. Wonderful work!
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I adored this poem, fantastical, romantic and put a smile on my face. Truly a wonderful tale. Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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Excellent!
When I read good poetry I recite it with a bit of envy, thinking, wish I composed it.
If I may be permitted to instill a little humor. I would have loved to had been there seeing you making love to a god having a human torso and head with a goat's legs, horns, and ears....lol
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I like this very much. It's a very good fairytale. You did very well with the rhyme scheme and I like how you used older words. Very good write. Good luck.
Alyssa
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Oh this is such a mesmerizing story...it seemed like a fairy tale but you've written it with conviction that this memory of yours is indeed true...this poem was like the sweetest fantasy of all hopeful girls...like me...
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this poem was really strongly written and i loved the way it flowed...good luck
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Absolutely magical! I love this vision of Pan & that you combine it with sweet memory, bonny men, & music!
But the line that really stands out to me is:
"For past is rotted with the weeds, and future not begun"~~it imparts such a wisdom of how life really is lived. Thank-you for writing such beautiful lore.
Blue
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