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Allowing Heartbreak

Allowing Heartbreak 

Grieving should have left by now,

that pain with which we live

and hold inside

until it begins to erode

a person’s soul.

 

Much like the tarnish

that covers Grandma’s silver,

that Grandma didn’t realize

she’d spend so many years

polishing it,

yet she continued to polish.

 

But I no longer grieve

as I sit alone on the bench

that Grandfather had made

so many decades ago,

the one he carved out of logs,

special ones that were grown

somewhere on his thousand acres.

 

Once he told me that I was not to grieve,

for it is a selfish emotion

that allows only one’s heartbreak

to continue forever more,

yet it gives nothing in return.

 

© Patricia Jeffress aka pattyann4500

February 24, 2007

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Waste not fresh tears over old griefs.
-Euripides

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  • panegyric ink
    March 1, 2007

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    last stanza!!!!AWSOME!!! Patricia, this is one of those perfect poems rare... authentically- genuine.
    -brian.


  • jjbreunig3
    February 26, 2007

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    An enjoyable piece...

    An enjoyable piece; an interesting intrepretation of the Eripides quote; grieving for the loss of a loved one is never the problem - the problem is being overly consumed with grief, so it prevents us from living; we must learn and grow from our life experiences - and pain is something we all must learn to deal with individually; nicely done. --Joe


    • pattyann4500
      February 26, 2007
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      In my reply to another, I told that my aunt grieved herself to death for my uncle over a span of 30 years. I believe she delved into the self-pity a bit too long.

      Thank you, Joe. Hugs, Patricia


  • leo2
    February 26, 2007

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    I feel it neither shameful nor selfish to grieve over lost loves. If grief is a selfish emotion than so be it.. I'm selfish. Best of luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

    • pattyann4500
      February 26, 2007
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      Indeed, Leo, we all tend to grieve, and some longer than others. My aunt felt so strongly that she was supposed to grieve herself to death for her husband that she did...over a span of thirty years.

      Thank you, my dear friend, for stopping by. Hugs, Patricia


  • Bedroom Eyes
    February 25, 2007

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    Is grief selfish? Perhaps it is in a way, and maybe your grandfather was right. But there are times when memories refuse to stay in the past. They move forward and remind us of what once was, and of what we've lost. While I agree that we shouldn't live in the past, to forget the past would be to make the same mistakes over again.

    The best of luck in the contest Patty!!

    • pattyann4500
      February 25, 2007
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      I have missed my father for just over thirty years. I guess I must say that sometimes I do grieve. It's not so selfish other than that person may be in a much better place.

      I do feel a little selfish in that I would not want him to have to live through the world as it is becoming. Although my life is pretty happy, I would not wish for my father to return to see how the world has changed.

      Thank you, as always, for your comments. Hugs, Patricia


  • Sherry gold member
    February 25, 2007

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    I am sure though its only because of the memories you miss Patty or some sort of special meaning it held in those moments. Really you have a bench of your gandfathers thats pretty neat. Sherry


    • pattyann4500
      February 25, 2007
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      I no longer grieve, I remember. It's all about being true to yourself. Thanks, Mom


  • Whoochi gold member
    February 24, 2007

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    This brings back a flood of memories for me...you see, my grandma and I, best friends used to spend hours polishing her "service set" and things..I felt so accomplished and proud once it was all shiney..and she was soo proud of me...wow..tears now....i miss her...but i know to this day that she looks down and is proud of me...i commend you on this word memory album you have created here...awesome....good luck!

    • pattyann4500
      February 25, 2007
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      I'm glad you found a beautiful memory in this. Sometimes we just have to go back home to find where our love and strength came from. It sounds like yours much have been from your grandmother. God bless you both.


  • perdisbeaute
    February 24, 2007

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    Oh, this is so sweet and sad at the same time. This really touched me, i love it!!!

    Thanks so much for entering!!


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    Excellent

    Patty this is brilliant, grief certainly eats away at people but i think in reality there is a time to grief then one should let go and get on with life. Love holds many a feeling and lose of a love being part of life but all to often people dwell on this for to longer a period of time. We should say our goodbyes and get on with life, as life is to short to live it in anothers shoes. Brilliant write my friend wishing you all the very best in this contest Brian.

    • pattyann4500
      February 24, 2007
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      I don't think I could agree more, Brian. We often feel disheartened when someone we care for leaves, but it's usually because we don't know where they are. If they were good people, I'm sure we'd be pleased to know they received their rewards. Thank you.


  • paullallady silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    this is such a terrific poem for this quotation.
    I love the repition implied by the grandmother
    polishing the silver over and over. It just seemed
    to touch me, almost like a useless act repeated and yet, hmmm, not sure. just really liked this.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    WoW! Now this is truly inspiring Patty. The poem fits the quote as if they were tailor made. I think you have done an impressive job here Sis. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Touchof1der

    • pattyann4500
      February 24, 2007
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      Thanks, Sis. It's kind of you to say so.

      Umm, I understand we live very close to each other. It's a very small world.


      • Touchof1der silver member
        February 24, 2007
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        I guess so. Chrissy just told me you live in Dallas now. That's amazing!


  • MargaretG
    February 24, 2007

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    This is well done, except I thought that the last two lines of stanza 2 clouded the main idea.
    It is wonderful to draw on the wisdom of grandparents - your Grandad was right, we cannot dwell long in grief. Good luck sweets!


    • pattyann4500
      February 24, 2007

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      Thank you, Margaret. I can't think of a more dangerous to one's health than grief unless we add jealousy.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    Hey Sis',

    This is a fluid work that flows effortlessly, and gives the reader many snapshots to remember.

    In this line, I would remove the word "it".

    "she’d spend so many years
    polishing it"


    Not necessary to have "it" at the end of a sentence.

    Other than that, this poem makes me think so hard on my grandparents who heavily influenced my life. I agree with the words your grandfather shared with you. He was indeed a wise man.

    Very beautiful poetry with a nostalgic feel.





    • pattyann4500
      February 24, 2007
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      Thank you. I fixed the grammatical error. I do appreciate your critique. Patricia

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