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miss whiplash

come, see me
if you like exraordinary
because normal
is not in my vocabulary
i'll tie you up
i'll whip your ass
i'll cover your penis
with hot wax
you'll be my bitch
and if you twitch
then slap

A contest entry

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  • pozo
    May 28, 2007

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    Bad piece, it even flows badly. The ending is non-existent.
    In conclusion, a crap poem, great for the contest
    Pozo

  • Bapudi
    May 26, 2007

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    haha

    Very nice entry. I like the misspelling of extraordinary in line two, it's a nice touch. The ending is totally unsatisfying, so I'm making you a finalist.


  • requiempoet gold member
    February 28, 2007

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    Hm. That seems short...like it could have more, it doesn't have to rhyme...but it's a good start. Good luck.


  • tawk gold member
    February 24, 2007
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    You made me laugh thank you, wow such a funny and emotional write. I so enjoyed it