Society ain't nothin' but a bitch
pimpin' us all.
She's immune to your whining,
quit while you've still got a voice.
She's gonna bend you over
anoint you with bitter seed
without an ounce of empathy.
Making a mockery of you
she'll leave you delusional
and outright dumb.
Charge twice your monthly income
to rent a dilapidated flat
in the slums.
Her husband, materialism, is a
bossy egocentric,
dictating her every move.
Look into her sensual
and tempting eyes,
see depravity and sarcasm
deep inside.
She will fill you with every drug
she can cop,
syringe forced into your veins
anticipation fills her
as she waits on them to rot
then call you the
atrocity of the neighborhood
'cuz you're just an addict
you ain't no good.
Immerse you with doubt
til you think it's
impossible to find a job.
Then play innocent
after she evokes
your anger
labeling you lazy
and lacking in ambition.
Everything vile
is beautiful to Society.
Anointing you with
hate and distrust,
she'll be satisfied
when you think life is unjust.
If she can get you down and afraid,
she'll keep you that way.
Called you friend when
she needed you yesterday,
she'll denounce you
when you need her today.
No euthenasia can kill this bitch,
she refuses to die.
We are all guilty,
we feed her and give her strength.
Every day she gets more powerful.
Her initials are monogrammed
on all our souls
and she's claimed us
as her status quo.
She'll have you so desperate to get
away from her clutches
that you'll pray for an escape
to serenity any way possible.
Either rapture, suicide, or homocide...
call it Calgon and take me away.
Author notes
I have no idea what I just wrote...I rambled majorly...so...yeah.
For my lazy hostess
As you wish Ma'am
impossible
immune
immerse
empathy
egocentric
euthenasia
denounce
depravity
delusional
dilapidated
vile
sarcasm
sensual
syringe
mockery
materialism
addict
ambition
rot
rapture
suicide
monogram
anoint
evoke
afraid
serene
In a list
A contest entry
- Heaven and Hell by zochit2me.
450 points, ended February 27, 2007, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
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300 points, ended March 10, 2007, 140 entries
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450 points, ended March 23, 2007, 15 entries
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I so rambled my way through that whole thing...
Comments
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I really like this, sitck it to the man and the women=) I really like some of the points you gave and i like how every on can relate to this, keep it up
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I really enjoy poems about society... although it was like a bit of rambling in some places, its a very good ramble! Kudos, its awesome
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That's some pretty damn good rambling! Though I don't really see the coralation between it and the right half of the pic, I really enjoyed reading this.
It had a free and hostile quality to it that was not forced.
"Charge twice your monthly income" - Preach on, preach on!
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This piece you have wrote here sounds just like how I have been feeling. Society has been the biggest mother fuckin bitch to me recently and most of my life. I kind of feel like really it should owe me something, even just a little piece and quiet from pain and suffering. I feel the anger, hurt and... well, anger. A lot of anger. Thanks for posting.
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well, i do not know if you edited it to smoothe it, but i definitely liked it today, prolly jes me being a fickle fanny
Luvs ya mad!! 
Mama
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Very provoking piece, loved the form and flow. Excellent use of metaphor in this piece. You conveyed truth and emotion with conviction. Excellent.
Bunny
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congradulations on the well deserve gold trophey.
thought provoking piece
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very well done...very truly penned...congratulations on the gold ...thanks
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I just went back and read this again and think it is Brilliant and perhaps fitting to the way I am feeling these days. Love it actually and the calgon take me away...great ending. Good good penning here.
Becky -
well my dear, I cannot say it is one of your best, but certainly not one of the worst either, not that you ahve any bad ones, just some not up to your usual standard hehe. There is some good potential in here if you would smoothe it out just a bit. Love ya ! Mama
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Great write but please add words used in authors notes because I am one of those lazy bitches...lol. I really enjoyed reading this though and consider it good material, just please stroke my ego and place words used in notes. Thanks for your entry
Becky -
Excellent
You definitely make some good points to totally relate with in this, that's for sure!!! You did not let up either from beginning to end. Awesome to say the least. Good luck in the contest
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WOW this piece has left me in awe. It is just a perfect discription of society, there was not one sentence I didn't agree with. This has to be one of my favourite pieces. Keep it up.
Lil
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HOLY SHITE!!!!
Dear god woman.... what the hell were you on when you wrote this? God, I love the rambling nature of this piece and the parallel between society and a spiteful woman wasn't badly drawn either. Absolutely wonderful work Heidi. I love this line especially: Everything vile is beautiful to Society, as well as the sarcastic way you ended the piece with a piece of marketing BS. Probably one of the best I've read of yours yet!
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