You once said I think too much
or was it drink too much?
Doesn't matter, you're right either way
I've done a lot of both since you left
Drink
and think
and drink some more
Thinking about you
Drinking about you
Hey, don't feel bad, I think about everything
Hell, I drink about everything too
until I can't feel it anymore
Two years, baby, two damn years
That's a hell of a long time, you know
A lot of thinking and hoping
and drinking and coping
and trying not to feel it anymore
I've done pretty well
I don't feel much of anything anymore
Now here you are
after all this time
After all the years of loving you
I've finally drank you away
and, damn it, here you are again
It's been so long, baby
but here you are, in my life again
in my arms again
Everything I hoped and prayed for
and guess what?
I can't feel it anymore
There's been a lot of years
and a lot of tears
and a hell of a lot of beers
since you left
And I just can't feel it anymore
Author notes
I hate it when you get what you want, then realize it's not what you wanted after all.
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There's been a lot of years
and a lot of tears
and a hell of a lot of beers
since you left
I can see here a heart is your pen and the tears as the ink as well..
the soul is the cry and the mind is just dipped in the love... a great piece indeed..
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lol that's life, as painful as it is sometimes! I love the way you've put this together. the flow, the beer's tears and years. It's probably meaningful to so many people who've experienced the same thing. Sometimes, what you think you want isn't really what you need but after that's realised you cna move on to something far better great poem
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wow...definitely a subject that relatable to most people. I thought this was very well written. I loved the casual, random piece of rhyme verse. For example,
A lot of thinking and hoping
and drinking and coping
It was conversational and the end was enough of a twist to make it interesting. Though this doesn't sound at all like a good situation, a good poem came out of it. Great work!
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amazing
I loved the way you put this.
The first two lines caught my attention and i just had to keep on reading.
but here you are, in my life again
in my arms again
Everything I hoped and prayed for
and guess what?
I can't feel it anymore
That's my favourite bit.
I can relate to this poem even though i don't drink my pain away, but i do think alot....I really enjoyed reading this
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I actually really liked this, And I hate it to, I also hate thuinking you don't want something only to realize it's what you really want. x.x Yea. lol
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great work
makes me feel sad because the words represent feelings i have felt myself. "I hate it when you get what you want, then realize it's not what you wanted all"
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It's been so long, baby
but here you are, in my life again
in my arms again
Everything I hoped and prayed for
and guess what?
I can't feel it anymore
There's been a lot of years
and a lot of tears
and a hell of a lot of beers
since you left
And I just can't feel it anymore
This is very deep and very true to so many...I love your message!!!!
Great Job!!!!
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This is a really great write...well done.
Kinky.
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Yeah not easy to gone back and two years is two years....
but all our past experience help to make us who we are today. Sad this poe be it flowed well an you draw in the reader make them feel what it is you say within your lines. You have a very good way of saying make sure what you wish for is what you want. We dont always get what we want and in love when you love and it is not returned then it is not meant to be but to give up so much of your life nah move on a hell of a lot sooner. Thank you for the pleasure .Nicely penned.
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I wasn't expecting the ending but I was glad that was the ending! It really fit with the poem. I so agree with your author comments and that is so what your poem is about.
Good luck in the contest! -
Beautifully Tragic
Yea, it's funny, human nature. oh well, you live you learn. Great piece. xoxoxo Shonda
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