death shall release me
from shutters of mind
that flicker in monochrome
like a film noire
mis-titled as casablanket
covering correspondence
that went unanswered
for I asked too much
of sunday souls
who take to pews
as duty dultily performed
preaches praise
in collection of plate
& I am not recalled
at ritual of turkey breasted
stuffed for ceremony
but hear my name echo
along these halls of time
as they lay blame
at my door
for their sins
sucking their souls
& I am chalk to those
that misuse my name
on scrawl of wall
dusted if they deign
to wipe me clean
leaving prints of fingers
that never should have touched another
meloncholia is my mace
sprayed across hipocrasy
hastening this dead-end journey
just to feed the egotistical
that drop dollars in a hat
they wouldn't care to wear
& if they walked in these shoes
they would stumble as did I
over beliefs that centered me
yet I leave this earthly plane
in the guise of broken
knowing that I mended
what I tried to fix
for the being of human
is what made me
a human being
Author notes
picture inspiration 2.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration........... by Lyre-Bird-.
530 points, ended March 9, 2007, 23 entries
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Thank you for entering the contest!!!!!!
Hope you have enjoyed the contest as much as we have enjoyed reading your entry
Best of Luck
Tracey -
There are so many amazing phrases and truly thought provoking lines pulsating within this piece. Very well written, with such attention to detail. Poignant, provocative, and wonderfully composed. Good luck to you in the contest!
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You have a way with words that so many don't and I love to drift through them and try to find the meaning that the words don't tell, you always suprise me and again in this write you do it again
Karen -
what I tried to fix
for the being of human
is what made me
a human being
Humm a great imagintion here to represent a picture...a picture with sentiments of the structure of this creation and its defination as well...the subject is so touchy and so much intensity in this work is the real issue to be disccused in details...Indeed a thought provoking work here..
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but hear my name echo
along these halls of time
as they lay blame
at my door
for their sins
sucking their souls
Very deep and emotional..great write!!!! -
"& I am chalk to those
that misuse my name
on scrawl of wall"
I feel this stanza through and through. Your vivid inscriptions are stellar. The last stanza wraps the entire poem up in a nonsensical persuasion. Excellent work!
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Excellent
Excellent write here Sis very deep and emotional, I like the way you put about those who lay blame at others door steps yet cannot look at themsleves or their own sins. Wishing you all the very best in this contest Brian.
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